Some people believe that robots will play an important role in future societies, while others argue that robots might have negative effects on society. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Sample Response
Robots are likely to become as ubiquitous as the smartphonessmartphone computers we all carry in future societyin our future society. While some people argue that robots might have negative impacts on future societythe future society, personally I believe that the benefits of robotsthe benefits of the robot are likely to outweigh the negative effectsnegative aspects of it. On the one hand, there are two main reasons why it could be argued that robots might have adverse effects on society in the future. Firstly, some people believe that robots will have a negative impact on the human workforce. PeopleThe people will be replaced by machines and this will increase the unemployment rate. As a result, many other problems may emerge such as poverty and increased crimecrimes. Secondly, people will become more dependent on robots in their daily liveslife and this may adverselyharmfully affect their skills in activities such as cooking and drivingtheir skills as cooking and driving. As a result, people may becomeSo people become less active and this may result in some health problems like obesity. On the other hand, I would agree with those who argue that robots will play important rolesimportant positive roles in future society. The first role is that robots could operate in locations that humans cannot reach such as exploration of outer spacethe outer space. They can act as extended eyes for humans enabling them to look beyond their visual boundaries. Moreover, robots will be used inside human bodiesthe human bodies to monitor health and perform surgeryfor monitoring their health and undertake surgery. The second role that will be played by robots is helping elderly and retired peoplethe helping of elderly and retired people with their daily life activities like cooking and cleaning. Finally, robots could do normal jobs quickly unlike human beings. Robots don not complain or get distracted or tired. They readily work twenty-four hours and require minimal maintenance. In conclusion, there are convincing arguments both for in and against the role of robots in our future would, but I believe that the robots will add many benefits to the future society.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response directly discusses both views, maintains a clear opinion, and supplies several relevant examples of potential risks and benefits. Its strongest feature is the breadth and orderly progression of its ideas, while frequent awkward collocations, grammatical slips, and the lack of paragraph breaks reduce precision and polish. The highest-priority improvement is to organise each view into a separate paragraph and revise inaccurate language combinations.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both views are addressed and the writer’s opinion remains clear, with relevant reasons and examples developed for each side.
Deepen the analysis by explaining fewer examples more fully and explicitly weighing why the benefits outweigh the risks.
Coherence and Cohesion
The ideas progress clearly from disadvantages to benefits and a conclusion, but the response is presented as one long paragraph with mechanical signposting.
Create separate paragraphs for the introduction, each view, and the conclusion, using cohesive devices more selectively within them.
Lexical Resource
The response has enough vocabulary to discuss technological and social effects, but frequent inaccurate collocations and word forms limit precision.
Revise phrases such as ‘increased crimes’, ‘skills as cooking’, and ‘the helping of elderly people’ into natural academic English.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The writer attempts a range of complex sentences, but recurring article, agreement, preposition, and construction errors weaken control.
Edit complex clauses systematically for articles, parallel verb forms, and complete structures, especially in sentences listing robot applications.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people believe that robots will play an important role in future societies, while others argue that robots might have negative effects on society. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
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