Nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish. Why do you think this is happening? What can governments do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced?
Sample Response
In the midst of globalisation and industrialisation, the amount of waste being exhaled, detrimental to our planet earth, is appalling. Reasons are aplenty, as to why this is a frequent occurrence and the imperative role of government worldwide over in countering this, is a moot one. Let us discourse on the same below.
There are many reasons behind the increase in the production of rubbish throughout the world. Firstly, the ever increase of population of the humankind has contributed to a mammoth share of the trash. The number of people has always been directly proportional to the volume of waste being produced from the time immemorial. Secondly, the industrial revolution, that shook the world a decade ago, is considered the sole culprit in the production of industrious waste onto earth’s surface. Again the number of industries and factories contributing to this menace is on a steep climb, since its inception.
Thirdly, the population rise has led to more transport system around the world, owing to an increase in the waste produced from the vehicles and other means of transport. To cite an example from the part of the world I live, the discarded parts of cars, such as a blotted tire, is ubiquitous, compared to the past. Finally, the sheer negligence from us, with regards to the recycling of waste products has led to adding more chaos to the present scenario. No care, what so ever, was taken in the production of biodegradable products, so as to mitigate the amount of trash produced!
The role of government in combating the issue is inevitable. They should be imposing restrictions on the above-discoursed factors, favouring waste segregation. Population check, of governments on their respective states, should be made mandatory. The industries and factories should be restricted and monitored for the effective recycling or biodegradation of their waste produced. The amenities used by mankind, such as transport should be made more efficient and effective in terms of discarded residual waste. Building eco-friendly homes should be encouraged. More emphasis should be made on the recycling of all the industrial trash being produced o an emergency basis. The government should focus more on the fact that these are either biodegradable or can be recycled effectively.
From the above discourse, someone's role as civilians of earth and that of government is quite interdependent and significant, when comes to reducing the amount of waste being produced. Punitive measures from the government are the needs of the hour, to tackle this issue, so as to ensure rather envisage, a cleaner and habitable planet earth.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use the correct verb Original: waste being exhaled Suggested revision: waste being generated Why it matters: Waste is generated or produced; "exhaled" describes breathing out air.
- 2. Fix the clause opening Original: Reasons are aplenty, as to why Suggested revision: There are many reasons why Why it matters: The replacement removes an unnecessary comma and creates a standard reason clause.
- 3. Fix number and prepositions Original: government worldwide over in countering this Suggested revision: governments worldwide in addressing this Why it matters: The general reference requires a plural noun and a single clear prepositional phrase.
- 4. Use the intended meaning Original: is a moot one Suggested revision: is crucial Why it matters: "Moot" means debatable or of little practical relevance, which conflicts with the claim that the role is imperative.
- 5. Fix the noun phrase Original: the ever increase of population of the humankind Suggested revision: the continual growth of the human population Why it matters: The replacement uses the correct noun form and removes the unnatural phrase "population of the humankind."
- 6. Use measured wording Original: a mammoth share of the trash Suggested revision: a substantial share of the waste Why it matters: The replacement conveys a large contribution in a more precise formal register.
- 7. Fix the fixed phrase Original: from the time immemorial Suggested revision: since time immemorial Why it matters: The established expression uses "since" and no article before "time."
- 8. Use the correct adjective Original: industrious waste Suggested revision: industrial waste Why it matters: "Industrial" relates to factories, whereas "industrious" describes a hardworking person.
- 9. Fix preposition and capital Original: onto earth’s surface Suggested revision: on the Earth's surface Why it matters: Waste is located "on" a surface, and the planet's name takes a capital letter.
- 10. Use natural phrasing Original: is on a steep climb Suggested revision: is rising steeply Why it matters: The verb phrase states the upward trend more naturally and concisely.
- 11. Use plural noun Original: more transport system Suggested revision: more transport systems Why it matters: The count noun must be plural after "more" in this general reference.
- 12. Add location relative Original: the part of the world I live Suggested revision: the part of the world where I live Why it matters: The relative adverb "where" is required to connect the place with the clause.
Suggested Rewrites
- waste being exhaled waste being generated
- Reasons are aplenty, as to why There are many reasons why
- government worldwide over in countering this governments worldwide in addressing this
- is a moot one is crucial
- the ever increase of population of the humankind the continual growth of the human population
- a mammoth share of the trash a substantial share of the waste
Why this response received Band 6.0
The essay addresses both questions and offers a broad range of causes and government actions, with industrial waste and recycling forming the most relevant thread. Its main limitation is that many ideas are listed rather than explained and are expressed through inaccurate or obscure language. The priority is to select fewer, clearly connected causes and policies, then explain each relationship in concise sentences using standard waste-management vocabulary.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
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Task Response
Both causes and government responses are covered, but several points are vague, weakly supported, or only loosely connected to reducing rubbish.
Focus on consumption, packaging, and poor recycling, then link each cause to a specific policy such as producer responsibility, collection systems, or landfill charges.
Coherence and Cohesion
Topic-based paragraphs and sequencing markers create a discernible structure, though long lists, unclear references, and repetition weaken progression.
Pair each cause with explanation and evidence, then organise the policy paragraph around two or three clearly prioritised measures.
Lexical Resource
The essay attempts a wide range of environmental vocabulary, but frequent miscollocations and inappropriate word choices often make the message unnatural or unclear.
Replace phrases such as waste being exhaled, industrious waste, population check, and above-discoursed factors with standard, precise terms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Simple and complex forms are both attempted, but errors in agreement, articles, punctuation, and clause construction are frequent and sometimes impede understanding.
Build shorter sentences around clear subjects and verbs, then check singular-plural agreement and remove unnecessary commas from core clauses.
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