All education (primary, secondary and further education) should be free to all people and paid and managed by the government. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Sample Response
Education is an important part of everyone's life and it plays a very important role in the growth of an individual. Making education free for everyone and managing all by the government will be a very big step towards the rapid growth of a society. All parents want to make their children educated by sending them to school, colleges but sometimes due to the lack of resources, they have to deprive their children even from the basic education. By making education free of all will ensure that nobody will miss education just because they can’t afford to pay. A government's step of making the education free will set an example in our society. It will show that if you have a strong will and determination to study and prosper, not having any money or resource will not stop you from making a paradigm shift. Education with no fees will identify all those talents which can be at top given education and guidance but get lost because their parents can’t afford to pay for schools. Everyone will stand equal chance to succeed. It will increase the literacy rate of that country and will improve the growth of that country as well. It was seen in the past that countries having higher literacy rates have been more successful. By making education free, a majority of people will be educated, making overall a positive environment in our society. There will be fewer crimes in society. Educating people will be making them more responsible. Governments should put more emphasis on education by making it free. Just like food and shelter education should also be a basic right and free for everyone.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Missing object pronoun Original: managing all by the government Suggested revision: having the government manage it all Why it matters: The original passive-like structure lacks a clear object and is ungrammatical.
- 2. Use natural verb Original: make their children educated Suggested revision: educate their children Why it matters: The verb "educate" expresses this meaning more naturally and precisely.
- 3. Fix number and list Original: to school, colleges Suggested revision: to schools and colleges Why it matters: Both institutions should be plural and joined with "and" in this two-item list.
- 4. Wrong preposition Original: even from the basic education Suggested revision: even of basic education Why it matters: The verb "deprive" takes "of," and no article is needed before education here.
- 5. Clarify the actor Original: A government's step Suggested revision: The government's decision Why it matters: "Decision" is more precise than "step" for this specific policy choice.
- 6. Remove unnecessary article Original: the education free Suggested revision: education free Why it matters: "Education" is used as an uncountable general concept and does not take "the" here.
- 7. Fix noun number Original: resource Suggested revision: resources Why it matters: The countable noun "resource" needs a plural form in this general statement.
- 8. Correct word choice Original: making a paradigm shift Suggested revision: transforming your life Why it matters: "Make a paradigm shift" does not naturally describe an individual's educational advancement.
- 9. Use concise phrasing Original: Education with no fees Suggested revision: Free education Why it matters: The shorter phrase is the standard and more natural expression.
- 10. Refer to people Original: identify all those talents Suggested revision: identify all those talented people Why it matters: Education identifies talented people rather than abstract talents in this context.
- 11. Fix idiom Original: can be at top Suggested revision: can excel Why it matters: "Be at top" is not idiomatic in this general claim about achievement.
- 12. Add conditional link Original: given education and guidance Suggested revision: if given education and guidance Why it matters: The condition needs "if" to connect it clearly to the possibility of excelling.
Suggested Rewrites
- managing all by the government having the government manage it all
- make their children educated educate their children
- to school, colleges to schools and colleges
- even from the basic education even of basic education
- A government's step The government's decision
- the education free education free
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response maintains a clear position in favour of free education and offers several relevant benefits, particularly wider access, social mobility, and higher literacy. However, the argument barely examines government management, its supporting claims remain general, and the single unbroken paragraph weakens presentation; the highest-priority improvement is to organise distinct body paragraphs and develop how both public funding and government administration would work, including a specific example.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear supportive position is developed through relevant benefits of free education, but government management is scarcely addressed and examples are limited.
Explain separately why government funding and government management are desirable, supporting each claim with a concrete example or mechanism.
Coherence and Cohesion
The ideas follow a broadly understandable sequence, but the entire response is presented as one paragraph and key points are repetitively linked.
Use an introduction, two focused body paragraphs, and a conclusion, with each body paragraph developing one distinct benefit.
Lexical Resource
The response has adequate vocabulary for access, literacy, talent, and social development, though several collocations and word choices are inaccurate.
Use precise combinations such as access to education, equal opportunities, identify talented students, and economic development.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Both simple and complex forms are attempted, but frequent article, preposition, agreement, and clause-structure errors reduce accuracy.
Check that every sentence has a clear subject and finite verb, especially when beginning with an -ing clause.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
All education (primary, secondary and further education) should be free to all people and paid and managed by the government. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Your response
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