All education (primary, secondary and further education) should be free to all people and paid and managed by the government. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Sample Response
The opinion that every citizen should have the right to study at school or university for free is a very controversial oneis very controversial one. Those who disagreeThose, who disagree, refer to enormous government expenditureexpenditures of government if such a policy were introducedin case of establishing such laws. HoweverAlthough, I hold the viewpoint that not charging people for education could become very beneficial for a country and its economy.
First, young people from poor families could be very smart. Looking back to history and biographies of distinguished people, raised in poverty can illustrate this best. Making schooling available only to the fortunateavailable only for fortunate is not fair. Moreover, the state'sstate well-being could also be affected, because there would be a lack of talented specialists, whose skills werewas not discovered and developed throughby proper training. Another advantage of making education free of charge is the nation's well-beinghappiness of the nation. An individual's inability to collect the amount of money he needs to pay school or university fee cause stress and anxiety in the middle-class society, which can even keep them from having children. Nowadays we can see that the lowest birthrate is in countries where enrolment feesprices of enrollment at higher-education institutionsto highest education institutions are very high. This clearly indicates the fact that citizens of rich countries do not feel able to provide their future offspring with proper educationprovide their future offspring proper education. Finally, nothing seems to be more beneficial to a country's economy than an educated and intelligent nation. Free courses and study programs can prepare excellent specialists, who would work to generate income for themselves and thereby benefit their countrybring profit themselves and hence their country. That would surely offset most state-budget expensescompensate most expenses of state budget caused by free educationeducation of no charge. To sum up, even though making all schools free can be very expensive for a state's economy, the benefits are substantialadvantages are invaluable. After several years, such improvementsAfter several years such improvements would bear fruit in the form of a happy, intelligent nation confident about its futurebring fruits of happy, intelligent nation confident about its future.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response advances a clear case for free education and develops several relevant benefits, particularly equal opportunity, the discovery of talent, and long-term economic gains. However, government management is not addressed, some social claims are asserted too confidently, and the long single body paragraph combines too many ideas; the highest-priority improvement is to discuss both public funding and administration explicitly in separate, well-supported paragraphs.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A consistent supportive position is developed through several relevant benefits, but government management is omitted and some evidence is speculative.
Add a focused argument about how government administration would affect quality, access, or efficiency, supported by a credible example.
Coherence and Cohesion
The sequence of benefits is understandable and signposted, but one oversized body paragraph and an unseparated conclusion weaken organisation.
Divide the discussion into focused paragraphs on fairness, social effects, and economic returns, followed by a distinct conclusion.
Lexical Resource
The response shows adequate range on education, inequality, wellbeing, and economics, but inaccurate collocations repeatedly reduce precision.
Use natural phrases such as government expenditure, access to higher education, discover talent, and offset public costs.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex structures are attempted frequently, but recurring fragments, agreement errors, missing articles, and faulty clause relationships reduce control.
Check every dependent clause for a complete main clause, then proofread agreement and articles within longer sentences.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
All education (primary, secondary and further education) should be free to all people and paid and managed by the government. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Your response
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