All education (primary, secondary and further education) should be free to all people and paid and managed by the government. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Sample Response
The opinion that every citizen should have the right to study at school or university for free is very controversial one. Those, who disagree, refer to enormous expenditures of government in case of establishing such laws. Although, I hold the viewpoint that not charging people for education could become very beneficial for a country and its economy.
First, young people from poor families could be very smart. Looking back to history and biographies of distinguished people, raised in poverty can illustrate this best. Making schooling available only for fortunate is not fair. Moreover, the state well-being could also be affected, because there would be a lack of talented specialists, whose skills was not discovered and developed by proper training. Another advantage of making education free of charge is the happiness of the nation. An individual's inability to collect the amount of money he needs to pay school or university fee cause stress and anxiety in the middle-class society, which can even keep them from having children. Nowadays we can see that the lowest birthrate is in countries where prices of enrollment to highest education institutions are very high. This clearly indicates the fact that citizens of rich countries do not feel able to provide their future offspring proper education. Finally, nothing seems to be more beneficial to a country's economy than an educated and intelligent nation. Free courses and study programs can prepare excellent specialists, who would work to bring profit themselves and hence their country. That would surely compensate most expenses of state budget caused by education of no charge. To sum up, even though making all schools free can be very expensive for a state's economy, advantages are invaluable. After several years such improvements would bring fruits of happy, intelligent nation confident about its future.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Add indefinite article Original: is very controversial one Suggested revision: is a very controversial one Why it matters: The singular countable substitute noun "one" requires the article "a".
- 2. Remove restrictive commas Original: Those, who disagree, Suggested revision: Those who disagree Why it matters: The relative clause identifies which people are meant and should not be enclosed by commas.
- 3. Use natural noun phrase Original: expenditures of government Suggested revision: government expenditure Why it matters: "Government expenditure" is the standard concise phrase for public spending.
- 4. Clarify condition Original: in case of establishing such laws Suggested revision: if such a policy were introduced Why it matters: The conditional phrase states the hypothetical policy consequence more clearly and naturally.
- 5. Fix concessive linker Original: Although Suggested revision: However Why it matters: "Although" must introduce a subordinate clause, whereas "however" can link this independent sentence.
- 6. Add article and preposition Original: available only for fortunate Suggested revision: available only to the fortunate Why it matters: Something is available "to" people, and the adjective used as a group noun requires "the".
- 7. Use possessive form Original: state Suggested revision: state's Why it matters: The possessive form is required to show that the well-being belongs to the state.
- 8. Fix subject agreement Original: was Suggested revision: were Why it matters: The plural subject "skills" requires the plural verb "were".
- 9. Use means preposition Original: by Suggested revision: through Why it matters: "Through" more naturally expresses training as the means of developing skills.
- 10. Use broader concept Original: happiness of the nation Suggested revision: nation's well-being Why it matters: "Well-being" more precisely covers the social effect described in the following sentences.
- 11. Use fee collocation Original: prices of enrollment Suggested revision: enrolment fees Why it matters: Institutions charge enrolment fees rather than prices of enrolment.
- 12. Fix preposition and term Original: to highest education institutions Suggested revision: at higher-education institutions Why it matters: Fees are charged "at" institutions, and "higher education" is the correct term.
Suggested Rewrites
- is very controversial one is a very controversial one
- Those, who disagree, Those who disagree
- expenditures of government government expenditure
- in case of establishing such laws if such a policy were introduced
- Although However
- available only for fortunate available only to the fortunate
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response advances a clear case for free education and develops several relevant benefits, particularly equal opportunity, the discovery of talent, and long-term economic gains. However, government management is not addressed, some social claims are asserted too confidently, and the long single body paragraph combines too many ideas; the highest-priority improvement is to discuss both public funding and administration explicitly in separate, well-supported paragraphs.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A consistent supportive position is developed through several relevant benefits, but government management is omitted and some evidence is speculative.
Add a focused argument about how government administration would affect quality, access, or efficiency, supported by a credible example.
Coherence and Cohesion
The sequence of benefits is understandable and signposted, but one oversized body paragraph and an unseparated conclusion weaken organisation.
Divide the discussion into focused paragraphs on fairness, social effects, and economic returns, followed by a distinct conclusion.
Lexical Resource
The response shows adequate range on education, inequality, wellbeing, and economics, but inaccurate collocations repeatedly reduce precision.
Use natural phrases such as government expenditure, access to higher education, discover talent, and offset public costs.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex structures are attempted frequently, but recurring fragments, agreement errors, missing articles, and faulty clause relationships reduce control.
Check every dependent clause for a complete main clause, then proofread agreement and articles within longer sentences.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
All education (primary, secondary and further education) should be free to all people and paid and managed by the government. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?
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