Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? There is nothing that young people can teach older people. Use specific reasons and examples to support your position.
Sample Response
Older people are generally believed to have better experiences and practical views about life than the young generation. Albeit that, I disagree with the view that young people have nothing to teach them. First of all, young people can adopt technology faster and they can teach their seniors how to use these technologies to improve lifestyle. For instance, I have noticed several times that my 10 years old nephew was teaching my grandfather how to use Facebook, how to operate a digital camera, where to search for a particular information on the internet and lots of such things. So obviously my grandfather learned from my nephew and there are such many technological aspects young people can teach the older ones. Secondly, youths know the changes and trends of the current world better than older persons and that’s something they can share with the aged people. For instance, my sister who is a sophomore shares numerous information with my father and aunt regarding the politics, social progress, roles of Government, policy changes etc. and to me, my sister seems to be well informed than my father and aunt regarding the current affairs. From my experience, I can see that older people have a better experience and they can advice what are the correct things to do. In certain sectors, like research, teaching, banking etc. they are performing far better than young employees. But the sectors where the innovation and hardworking are required, young people prone to do better. In my opinion, there are yet tonnes of things that the older people can learn from young people including technologies where the young people always excel than the elder generation.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use uncountable noun Original: better experiences Suggested revision: more experience Why it matters: 'Experience' is uncountable when it means accumulated practical knowledge.
- 2. Use natural phrasing Original: practical views about life Suggested revision: practical perspectives on life Why it matters: 'Perspectives on life' is a more natural collocation for viewpoints shaped by experience.
- 3. Use valid connector Original: Albeit that Suggested revision: Nevertheless Why it matters: 'Albeit' cannot stand alone as a sentence connector in this form.
- 4. Choose accurate verb Original: adopt technology faster Suggested revision: adapt to technology more quickly Why it matters: 'Adapt to' expresses becoming comfortable with technology, while 'adopt' means deciding to use it.
- 5. Add possessive and plural Original: improve lifestyle Suggested revision: improve their lifestyles Why it matters: The phrase needs a possessive determiner and a plural noun to refer to multiple seniors.
- 6. Remove incorrect article Original: a particular information Suggested revision: particular information Why it matters: 'Information' is uncountable and cannot take the article 'a'.
- 7. Use precise wording Original: lots of such things Suggested revision: many similar tasks Why it matters: The revision refers more clearly to the technological activities in the list.
- 8. Fix quantifier order Original: such many Suggested revision: many Why it matters: 'Such' cannot precede 'many' in this construction.
- 9. Name the skill clearly Original: aspects Suggested revision: skills Why it matters: The examples concern practical skills rather than unspecified aspects of technology.
- 10. Use natural group noun Original: youths Suggested revision: young people Why it matters: 'Young people' is the more natural term for this age group in the essay.
- 11. Use respectful term Original: aged Suggested revision: older Why it matters: 'Older people' is the standard neutral expression in this context.
- 12. Fix uncountable quantity Original: numerous information Suggested revision: a great deal of information Why it matters: The uncountable noun 'information' cannot be modified by 'numerous'.
Suggested Rewrites
- better experiences more experience
- practical views about life practical perspectives on life
- Albeit that Nevertheless
- adopt technology faster adapt to technology more quickly
- improve lifestyle improve their lifestyles
- a particular information particular information
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response gives a clear disagreement, develops two relevant areas in which younger people can teach older people, and supports both with personal examples. Its effectiveness is limited by the absence of paragraphing and by frequent grammatical and lexical inaccuracies, although the argument remains understandable. The highest-priority improvement is to organize each main reason into its own paragraph and edit recurring comparison, countability, and verb-form errors.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The position is clear and supported with two relevant, extended reasons and specific examples, despite a brief digression about older people's strengths.
Keep the counterpoint concise and explain more precisely how knowledge of current trends benefits older people.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument follows a logical sequence, but presenting the entire essay as one paragraph weakens its organization and readability.
Use separate introduction, body, and conclusion paragraphs, with one body paragraph for each main reason.
Lexical Resource
The response shows adequate range for the topic, but recurring errors in collocation, countability, and comparison reduce precision.
Use accurate forms such as information, better informed than, advice, and excel at, and avoid awkward age-related labels.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Both simple and complex sentences are used, but frequent errors in articles, noun forms, agreement, and comparative structures remain evident.
Systematically check noun countability and comparative patterns, then revise incomplete constructions such as young people are prone to do better.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? There is nothing that young people can teach older people. Use specific reasons and examples to support your position.
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