We were given a chart that included one line graph and one bar chart.
Sample Response
The charts compare the percentage changes in temperaturechanges in temperature and rainfalland the amount of precipitation in Algeria in the year 2000.
It is clear that Algeria saw the highest temperature induring August, while December was the month with the smallest temperature changecoldest month of the year 2000. In Algeria, rainfall was highestthe amount of rainfall was largest in January, whereas Algeria experienced the least rainfalllowest humidity in August. Overall, the temperature in Algeria generally moved in the opposite direction tois in inverse proportion to the rainfall.
DeleteAs can be seen from the charts, the largest amount of rainfall was 6 mmrain fell (6mm) in January 2000, and the temperature change was about 8%temperature of the month increased to 8%. When the precipitation in Algeria decreased to about 2.5mm, in February the temperature rose to about 14%. By April, the temperature change fell to about 5%temperature continued to drop to 5%, while rainfall reached its second-highest levelthe total rainfall stood at its second highest at about 4.5mm.
The temperature rose steadily from April onwardrose steadily April onward, and reached a peak of about 22% in August. However, rainfall generally decreased from Aprilthe amount of precipitation decreased from April and dropped significantly to approximately 0.5mm by August. In December, Algeria saw the lowest temperature with only about an increase of about 2%one tenth percent increase. On the other hand, just over 4mm of rain fell in the same period.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The report has a clear overview and uses well-chosen monthly figures to explain the broadly opposing patterns in temperature change and rainfall. Its effectiveness is reduced by imprecise terminology, especially calling rainfall "humidity," and by awkward descriptions of percentage changes that sometimes blur the metric. Prioritise naming both measures exactly as labelled and expressing percentages unambiguously.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response identifies the principal highs, lows, and contrasting relationship and supports them with mostly accurate monthly data from both charts.
Distinguish rainfall from humidity and describe the plotted temperature percentage as a change from the previous year.
Coherence and Cohesion
The overview and two detail paragraphs create a logical progression, while comparisons between the charts are generally easy to follow.
Organise the detail around consistent time periods so corresponding movements in the two measures can be compared more directly.
Lexical Resource
A good range of trend and comparison language is evident, but inaccurate choices such as "humidity" and "inverse proportion" reduce precision.
Use the chart labels exactly and reserve mathematical expressions for relationships that the data fully supports.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses varied complex structures with generally clear meaning, although several clauses and time phrases are awkwardly formed.
Edit constructions such as "April onward" and percentage descriptions so their grammatical relationships are explicit.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
We were given a chart that included one line graph and one bar chart.
Your response
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