The maps show the changes that have taken place at an Australian Zoo between 1960 and now.
Sample Response
Your essay The given plans illustrate the changes that an Australian zooAustralian Zoo has experienced between 1960 and today.
Overall, it can be seen that the zoo underwent significant transformationswitnessed greater developments, as some of the attractionssome of attractions have been replaced, and new facilities have been introduced.
On the northern side, the HarbourOn the northern side the Harbour has been relocatedreplaced to the northwest, and in its placeinstead its place a new entrance has been constructed with a ferry nearby. Another entry has been built on the southern side to provide easy access. The picnic area on the eastern side remained unchanged; howeverunchanged, however, a neighbouring cable car has been erected. The gift shop on the southern sidegift shop on the southern remained in its original locationon its origin place, but it has been redesigned.
In 1960, there were African and Australian animals on the western side of the zoo. Today, the area of African animals is occupied by wild animalsones, while Australian animals are still in the same placestill on their own place. The African animalscreatures have been relocatedreplaced to the eastern part of the main path, as a result, the birds and chimpanzees' sectorssector have been removed. In addition, asAs by now the new transportation infrastructure has been built, the Seal show hasSeal show has been movedreplaced closer to the footpath.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The report effectively covers the main structural and layout changes of the zoo, providing a clear overview and a logical paragraph structure. The main limitations lie in grammatical inaccuracies and awkward prepositional or verb phrasing that occasionally affect flow. To improve, focus on mastering passive constructions, precise prepositions of location, and accurate spatial vocabulary.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response identifies key map developments and includes a clear overview, though some feature descriptions are slightly imprecise.
Ensure all features and relocations are described with exact spatial accuracy and clear comparative language.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is organized logically into paragraphs by thematic changes, with basic cohesive devices linking ideas.
Use a wider variety of transition words and phrases to connect sentences more smoothly within body paragraphs.
Lexical Resource
A sufficient range of task-relevant vocabulary is present, though word choice errors and awkward collocations occur frequently.
Practice using accurate map vocabulary such as 'relocated to', 'situated', and 'replaced by' rather than 'replaced to'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Simple and complex structures are attempted, but recurring grammatical and prepositional errors are noticeable throughout.
Review prepositional phrases of place and ensure verbs are correctly formed in present perfect passive structures.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The maps show the changes that have taken place at an Australian Zoo between 1960 and now.
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