The chart shows average levels of rainfall in Marley in the UK.
Sample Response
The bar graph describes the usual amount of rain precipitate over a year in Marley, UK. It can be clearly seen that December, September and January have the highest amount of rainfall noted in a year. Primarily, from December to September, the amount of rainfall increases from about 84mm to approximately 94mm. the rainfall in October has an identical amount in December by about 84mm. interestingly, the level of rainfall dramatically declines from September to May, which levels off at about 51mm. However, this trend does not last when the rain precipitate minimally rises in April (58mm) and is followed by a moderate soar in March by approximately 64mm. In February, the figure decreases but it is followed by a tremendous increase in January that reaches by roughly 79mm. Overall, there is a drop in rainfall in the middle of the year, yet it increases dramatically in the succeeding months.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use correct noun Original: amount of rain precipitate Suggested revision: amount of rainfall Why it matters: Rainfall is the correct noun for the amount of rain recorded.
- 2. Order the peaks Original: December, September and January Suggested revision: September, January and December Why it matters: The chart shows September as the highest month, followed by January and December.
- 3. Use precise reporting Original: rainfall noted in a year Suggested revision: rainfall recorded during the year Why it matters: Recorded is a more precise verb for chart data.
- 4. Use a clear transition Original: Primarily Suggested revision: Turning to the monthly figures Why it matters: This transition states the purpose of the detailed comparison more clearly.
- 5. Capitalize sentence opening Original: interestingly Suggested revision: Interestingly Why it matters: A word beginning a new sentence requires a capital letter.
- 6. Correct the May figure Original: levels off at about 51mm Suggested revision: reaches about 54 mm in May Why it matters: The chart shows a May value near 54 mm and does not show a plateau there.
- 7. Correct the expression Original: when the rain precipitate Suggested revision: as rainfall Why it matters: Rainfall is the natural noun and as correctly introduces the change.
- 8. Use natural adverb Original: minimally rises Suggested revision: rises slightly Why it matters: Rises slightly is the standard expression for a small increase.
- 9. Correct April data Original: April (58mm) Suggested revision: April (about 55 mm) Why it matters: The April bar is approximately 55 mm rather than 58 mm.
- 10. Avoid contradictory wording Original: soar Suggested revision: increase Why it matters: Soar implies a very large rise and conflicts with moderate.
- 11. Correct March data Original: approximately 64mm Suggested revision: approximately 58 mm Why it matters: The March bar is just under 60 mm, not 64 mm.
- 12. Clarify the comparison Original: In February, the figure decreases Suggested revision: Moving backwards to February, the figure decreases slightly Why it matters: The direction is only clear when the reverse chronological sequence is stated.
Suggested Rewrites
- amount of rain precipitate amount of rainfall
- December, September and January September, January and December
- rainfall noted in a year rainfall recorded during the year
- Primarily Turning to the monthly figures
- interestingly Interestingly
- levels off at about 51mm reaches about 54 mm in May
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response identifies the broad mid-year dip and some of the wetter months, and its meaning remains generally understandable despite ambitious wording. However, numerous values are overstated, the months are discussed in a confusing reverse sequence, and several comparisons are inaccurate or unclear. The highest priority is to organise the report chronologically and verify each figure against the chart, using simpler, more precise language for changes.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A broad overview is present and some main movements are recognised, but several rainfall figures and comparisons do not match the chart.
Report the accurate values, such as September at about 82 mm and the mid-year low near 54 mm, and compare months in a clear sequence.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas are linked with a range of cohesive devices, but the single paragraph and reverse movement through the months make progression difficult to follow.
Use an overview paragraph followed by logically grouped details, preferably moving chronologically from January to December or grouping wetter and drier months.
Lexical Resource
The response attempts varied language for trends, but frequent miscollocations such as references to rain precipitate and a moderate soar reduce precision.
Prefer accurate combinations such as rainfall rose, fell, remained stable, and reached a peak, avoiding exaggerated trend words for small changes.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of sentence forms conveys the main meaning, although frequent article, preposition, capitalisation, and clause-control errors weaken accuracy.
Check sentence openings, articles, and verb-preposition patterns, especially structures used to describe figures reaching or changing to a value.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The chart shows average levels of rainfall in Marley in the UK.
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