The graph below shows the price of bananas in four countries between 1996 and 2004.

Sample Response

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The line graph illustrates the prices of bananas in Japan, France, Germany and the USA between 1996 and 2004. Overall, Japan had the highest banana priceshighest banana prices of bananas throughout most of the period, with the greatest degree of fluctuationand fluctuated the most. The USA held the lowest price of bananas, with Germany and France remaining between these two countries. The USA held the lowest price of bananas, at only US$1 per kilogram in 1996. Then the price in the USA remained flat at US$1 in 1997 before rising in 1998increased sharply in 1997, climbing to approximately US$1.3 per kilogram in 1998climbing to a peak of approximately US$1.4 per kilogram. After that, the price in the USA remained stable at around US$1.3. But the price in Japan was much higher. Except in 2003, Japan experienced a sharp drop from US$2.5 to US$1.5Japan experienced a shock dropping from US$2.5 to US$1.5, lower than US$2 in France and nearly US$1.8 in Germany. At other timestime, Japan recorded the highest price. The prices in Germany and France also fluctuated significantly, but wereThe price in Germany and France also fluctuated a lot, but were much lower than Japan. In 1996, France and Japan both stood at US$2 per kilogramshared the price of US$2, and the price in Germany was US$1.5. Then the three countriesconutries fluctuated to different extents. In 1996 and 1997, the price in France remained stable, Germany decreased to approximately US$1.3 and Japan experienced a sharp increase to a peak of US$3. However, all of them decreased significantly in 1999, with Japan falling to US$2, Germany dropping to nearly US$1.2, and France decreasing to US$1.5Japan falling to US$2, Germany dropping to nearly US$1.3 and France decreasing to US$1.5.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.0

文章能够对图表的主要趋势进行概括,并涵盖了大部分关键数据对比。主要不足在于部分年份与数据点的归纳不够精准(如将日本的最高峰年份误记),且存在个别句式重复。建议进一步提高数据拟合的准确度,并优化句式连接与多样性。

Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TA

任务完成度

6.0
Scoring rule

包含清晰的总体趋势概述,并对四个国家的价格变化进行了提炼,但部分具体年份与数据细节存在偏差。

Next step

在核对图表数据时须格外注意时间节点,确保描述的变化趋势与图表年份完全一致。

CC

连贯与衔接

6.0
Scoring rule

文章分段基本合理且逻辑清晰,但段落开头的句子出现了无谓的重复,影响了文章衔接的流畅度。

Next step

注意段落间的自然过渡,避免跨段落重复完全相同的句式和表达。

LR

词汇资源

6.0
Scoring rule

词汇量足以完成描述任务,并使用了不少恰当的趋势词汇,但偶有拼写错误与词汇搭配不恰当的情况。

Next step

加强对常见写作词汇拼写(如 countries)以及固定搭配准确度的检查。

GRA

语法多样性与准确性

6.0
Scoring rule

展现了使用多种句型的能力(如分词短语作状语),但句法结构错误和介词搭配不当的现象依然较为常见。

Next step

重点提升复合句和非谓语动词短语的语法结构精准度,减少标点与连接词的误用。

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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1

The graph below shows the price of bananas in four countries between 1996 and 2004.

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