The tables below give information about the amount of beer and fruit juice consumed per person per year in different countries.
Sample Response
The given tables show data on the consumption of beer and fruit juice in two sets of ten countriesten different countries. As is presented in the tables, Irish and German people consume the highest amount of beers per person while the Canadian and American people consume the highest amount of fruit juice per person per year. According to the first table, Irish people consume the highest amount of beer per person in a year amounting to 155 litresamounting 155 litres while Finns consumedFinnish took 79 litres per year on averageper year on an average. German and AustrianAustralian citizens take more than 100 litres of beer100 litres beer each year while they take about 37.3–38.6 litres of fruit juice34-38 litre fruit juices per person per year. People inof Belgium and Denmark both take 98 litres of beer98 litres beer while people of UK, Australia, US, Netherland consume less than 90 litres beer on an average. Finns consumedFinnish people take the least amount of beer on an average amounting 79 litres per person annually. On the other hand, people of these given countries drink fruit juice less than half of the amount they drink the beers. Canadian people drink the largest amount of fruit juice amountingcontributing to 52.6 litres per person annually, while this amount is less than 50 litres for all other countries. New ZealandersNew Zealand people consume the least amount of fruit juice each year on an average. In conclusion, people of the given countries drink more beer than fruit juice on averagefruit juices on an average.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response provides a clear overview and covers both tables with several useful comparisons. Its main limitation is accuracy: Australia is wrongly placed above 100 litres of beer, the UK is wrongly grouped below 90 litres, and some consumption claims are overgeneralised. The priority is to check every selected figure against the tables and compare only accurately matched countries.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response presents an overview and relevant data from both tables, but several country groupings and comparisons are inaccurate.
Verify each country and figure carefully, especially Austria versus Australia and the United Kingdom's beer consumption.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information progresses from beer to fruit juice with generally clear linking, although repetition and the single-paragraph presentation weaken organisation.
Use separate overview and detail paragraphs, grouping the beer and fruit-juice comparisons more systematically.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is adequate for describing quantities and comparisons, but repeated words and awkward choices such as “take” reduce precision.
Use more natural data-reporting verbs such as “consume,” “record,” and “account for,” with accurate singular and plural forms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex sentences communicates the main meaning, but article, agreement, tense, and plural errors recur.
Edit noun phrases and verb forms carefully, particularly expressions such as “litres of beer” and “people consume.”
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The tables below give information about the amount of beer and fruit juice consumed per person per year in different countries.
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