The tables below give information about the amount of beer and fruit juice consumed per person per year in different countries.
Sample Response
The given tables show data on the consumption of beer and fruit juice in ten different countries. As is presented in the tables, Irish and German people consume the highest amount of beers per person while the Canadian and American people consume the highest amount of fruit juice per person per year. According to the first table, Irish people consume the highest amount of beer per person in a year amounting 155 litres while Finnish took 79 litres per year on an average. German and Australian citizens take more than 100 litres beer each year while they take about 34-38 litre fruit juices per person per year. People of Belgium and Denmark both take 98 litres beer while people of UK, Australia, US, Netherland consume less than 90 litres beer on an average. Finnish people take the least amount of beer on an average amounting 79 litres per person annually. On the other hand, people of these given countries drink fruit juice less than half of the amount they drink the beers. Canadian people drink the largest amount of fruit juice contributing to 52.6 litres per person annually, while this amount is less than 50 litres for all other countries. New Zealand people consume the least amount of fruit juice each year on an average. In conclusion, people of the given countries drink more beer than fruit juices on an average.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Clarify country sets Original: ten different countries Suggested revision: two sets of ten countries Why it matters: The two tables contain different country lists rather than the same ten countries.
- 2. Add missing preposition Original: amounting 155 litres Suggested revision: amounting to 155 litres Why it matters: The verb phrase requires the preposition 'to' before the quantity.
- 3. Fix noun and tense Original: Finnish took Suggested revision: Finns consumed Why it matters: Use the noun for the people and maintain past tense when reporting the table.
- 4. Use standard phrase Original: per year on an average Suggested revision: per year on average Why it matters: 'On average' is the standard expression.
- 5. Correct country Original: Australian Suggested revision: Austrian Why it matters: The beer table lists Austria at 106 litres, not Australia.
- 6. Add quantity preposition Original: 100 litres beer Suggested revision: 100 litres of beer Why it matters: A measured quantity requires 'of' before the uncountable noun.
- 7. Correct range and form Original: 34-38 litre fruit juices Suggested revision: 37.3–38.6 litres of fruit juice Why it matters: The fruit-juice figures for Austria and Germany are 37.3 and 38.6 litres.
- 8. Use natural demonym Original: of Suggested revision: in Why it matters: 'People in Belgium' is the natural way to identify residents in this context.
- 9. Add quantity preposition Original: 98 litres beer Suggested revision: 98 litres of beer Why it matters: Use 'of' between a measured quantity and an uncountable noun.
- 10. Use accurate form Original: Finnish people take Suggested revision: Finns consumed Why it matters: The revised phrase uses a natural noun and keeps the report in past tense.
- 11. Use quantity verb Original: contributing Suggested revision: amounting Why it matters: 'Amounting to' correctly introduces a consumption figure.
- 12. Use correct demonym Original: New Zealand people Suggested revision: New Zealanders Why it matters: 'New Zealanders' is the concise standard term for people from New Zealand.
Suggested Rewrites
- ten different countries two sets of ten countries
- amounting 155 litres amounting to 155 litres
- Finnish took Finns consumed
- per year on an average per year on average
- Australian Austrian
- 100 litres beer 100 litres of beer
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response provides a clear overview and covers both tables with several useful comparisons. Its main limitation is accuracy: Australia is wrongly placed above 100 litres of beer, the UK is wrongly grouped below 90 litres, and some consumption claims are overgeneralised. The priority is to check every selected figure against the tables and compare only accurately matched countries.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
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Task Achievement
The response presents an overview and relevant data from both tables, but several country groupings and comparisons are inaccurate.
Verify each country and figure carefully, especially Austria versus Australia and the United Kingdom's beer consumption.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information progresses from beer to fruit juice with generally clear linking, although repetition and the single-paragraph presentation weaken organisation.
Use separate overview and detail paragraphs, grouping the beer and fruit-juice comparisons more systematically.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is adequate for describing quantities and comparisons, but repeated words and awkward choices such as “take” reduce precision.
Use more natural data-reporting verbs such as “consume,” “record,” and “account for,” with accurate singular and plural forms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex sentences communicates the main meaning, but article, agreement, tense, and plural errors recur.
Edit noun phrases and verb forms carefully, particularly expressions such as “litres of beer” and “people consume.”
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The tables below give information about the amount of beer and fruit juice consumed per person per year in different countries.
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