The Pie chart gives information about the country of birth of people living in Australia and the table shows where people born in these countries live
Sample Response
The pie chart details the distribution of the Australian population by country of birthpercentage of the Australian population in terms of their place of birth, whilst the table illustrates where these people reside.
Overall, what stands out from the pie chartthe graph is that the majority of people living in Australia were born in Australiaright in this country. It is also evident from the table that urban areas are more favoured among all five birth groupsamong these people.
Regarding the pie chart, Australia is the birthplace of 73% of the population. Meanwhile, 14% of people living in Australia were born in other countries, which is double the figure for the UK. Residents who were born inhave home countries in New Zealand, China and the NetherlandsChina and Netherlands account for negligible proportions of 3%, 2% and 1%.
With respect to the table, it is clear that 99% of peopleAustralians born in China live in citieslive in the city, higher thanmuch higher than the figures for those from the Netherlands, the UK, or Australia, at 90%, 89%, and 83% respectively. Coming last is the natives of New Zealand, who constitute the largest share of those living in rural areas, at 20%.
Why this response received Band 8.0
The response gives a clear, accurate overview and selects the main figures from both visuals, with effective comparisons and generally precise language. Its main limitation is a small amount of awkward or imprecise wording, especially in references to national groups, plus a subject–verb agreement slip in the final sentence. Prioritise more natural descriptions of people born in each country and proofread agreement in inverted sentence structures.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response accurately presents a clear overview and well-chosen key figures from both the pie chart and the table.
Add one or two direct rural-versus-city comparisons to make the table analysis even more comprehensive.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information progresses logically from the overview to separate, focused discussions of the two visuals.
Use a slightly more explicit link between the table comparisons to sharpen the progression within the final paragraph.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is varied and generally precise, although expressions such as references to home countries and natives sound awkward in context.
Prefer natural formulations such as people born in New Zealand when describing national groups.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A flexible range of sentence structures is handled accurately apart from a few localised errors.
Check article use with country names and subject–verb agreement in inverted constructions such as the final sentence.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The Pie chart gives information about the country of birth of people living in Australia and the table shows where people born in these countries live
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