The pie graphs below show the result of a survey of children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which girls participate.
Sample Response
The pie charts present survey resultsenumerate a survey result which compares the types of cultural and leisure activitiesthe type of cultural and free-time activities boys and girls participate in. At first glanceAt the first glance, boys generally prefer computer games and outdoor sportscomputer games, and outdoor sports while girls mostly participateparticipated in activities like dancing, gymnastics and reading. As is presented in the diagrams, more than one-third of boysmore than one-third boys play computer games while just over one-quarter playone-quarter play basketball. Moreover, nearly one in five boys plays soccer and one-tenth of them go skateboardinglike to do skateboarding. It is evidentprevalent from the illustration that boys mostly play games and take part in outdoor sports. Reading is the least popular activity among boysThe reading habit among boys is very poor as only 2% of them read. Interestingly, listening to music is an activity enjoyed by equal proportions of boys and girls (10% each)which is enjoyed by an equal percentage (10%) of boys and girls. Moving to the girls’ activities, playing computer games is not as popular among girls as it is among boys. The most popular pursuits among girls are dancing (27% participate in it27% pick this up) and reading (more than one-fifth are active readers). Among sports activitiesoutdoor sports and activity, gymnastics and netballnetballs are common among female children as 11% and 15% participate in these two outdoor activities. Interestingly, the ratio of reading among girls is considerably higher than that of boys.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The report's strongest feature is its comprehensive and accurate selection of data: it identifies the leading activities, covers nearly every category, and makes useful cross-gender comparisons for music, computer games, and reading. Its main limitation is language control rather than content, with several awkward collocations, article errors, and number-form problems; the priority is to retain the strong comparisons while using more natural statistical phrasing and consistently accurate grammar.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response presents a clear overview, reports nearly all categories accurately, and makes relevant comparisons between boys and girls.
Add the girls' 16% figure for computer games and describe netball and gymnastics simply as activities rather than assuming both are outdoor sports.
Coherence and Cohesion
The report progresses clearly from the overview to boys' data and then girls' data, although all information is compressed into one paragraph and some linking is repetitive.
Use a short overview paragraph followed by separate detail paragraphs for boys and girls, retaining the cross-gender comparisons where they are most relevant.
Lexical Resource
The response shows useful range in describing proportions and preferences, but phrases such as 'enumerate a survey result', 'prevalent from the illustration', and 'pick this up' lack precision.
Prefer natural statistical language such as 'show', 'account for', 'participate in', and 'the proportion of children'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A variety of sentence forms is attempted, but article, plural, tense, and noun-form errors recur in phrases such as 'more than one-third boys' and 'netballs'.
Check articles and quantity structures, using forms such as 'more than one-third of boys', and keep the present tense consistent throughout the report.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The pie graphs below show the result of a survey of children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which girls participate.
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