The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.
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The pie charts illustrate how the percentage of UK studentspercentage of the UK students at a university in Englandan England university who could speak other languages apart from English differeddiffers in 2000 and 2010.
Overall, the largest proportion of students spoke no other languagemost of the students can not speak second language in both 2000 and 2010, while Spanish tended to be the most popular language in 2000 and students usually spoke another language except French, German and Spanish in 2010. Two other languages had the lowest shares in both 2000shares both 2000 and 2010.
With regard to 2000, students who could only speakonly can speak English accounted for 30%, followed by Spanish at 20%. Another language and French had the same proportion, at 15% eachrespectively.Similarly，German and two other languages made up 10% eachrespectively.
Whenwhen it came to 2010, the proportion of students who could not speak another languagecan not speak other language followed a similar pattern tohad the similar situation with 2000, accounting for 35%, as opposed to another language Deleterather than Spanish, at 20%. Then, two other languages followed atwas following another language, constituting 15%. FinallyLast, Spanish, French and German shared the same percentage, representing 10% eachrespectively.
Why this response received Band 5.0
The response presents a clear paragraph structure and attempts to cover both years using sequential comparative language. However, major misinterpretations of the chart legend led to inaccurate data reporting, such as confusing the figures for Spanish speakers with those who spoke no other language. To improve, double-check key labels carefully against chart segments before writing and work on improving grammatical accuracy.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
Key features are misidentified due to severe misinterpretation of the pie chart legend across both years.
Carefully align each slice of the pie chart with its corresponding legend key to ensure data is reported accurately.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is arranged chronologically, but cohesive devices feel mechanical and referencing is occasionally confused.
Use a wider variety of natural linking expressions instead of relying heavily on repetitive transition phrases.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is sufficient to convey a basic message, but word choices are repetitive and sometimes awkwardly framed.
Expand your range of language-related vocabulary and practice using accurate phrases for statistical proportions.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Frequent grammatical inaccuracies in verb forms, word order, and preposition use hinder the flow of writing.
Review modal verb positioning and subject-verb agreement to increase the proportion of error-free sentences.