The table below shows the leisure hours by Canadians in a year based on their age groups.
Sample Response
The table reveals data on the duration of yearly leisure activities by Canadians based on their age groups. As is obvious from the illustration, watching TV is the most popular free time activity among Canadians while young people take partparts in sports and exercise more than older people do. In detaildetails, a Canadian teenager spends 1200 hours watching TV programmes in a year, whichyear which is 100 hours more than that of people over 70 years old and three times the figure forthree times than that of people in their thirties. Hours spentspend watching TV by teens and older people are higher than those of the other age groupshigher than that of other age groups. Individual exercise is more popular among Canadians in their thirties and fortiesbetween 30 and 50 years as they spend 200 hours in a year, while group exercise and sports are preferredmore preferred by younger people. People over 60 do not take part in sports and groupgroups exercise. Socialising with more people is more common amongcommonly seen among younger people while adults like to have fewer people to socialise withfewer people to socialise. Cinema appears to beseems like the least preferred activity as roughly 75 hours on averageon an average is spentspend on this activity by all age groups.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response highlights the dominance of television and the broad age pattern in exercise and socialising, supported by several relevant comparisons. However, some generalisations are not fully accurate, especially the stated cinema average and the age range for individual exercise, while frequent grammatical slips reduce polish. Prioritise checking calculated summaries against every column and presenting the report in clear overview and detail paragraphs.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The main patterns and several key comparisons are identified, but the cinema average and the description of individual exercise across ages are inaccurate.
Verify summary calculations and distinguish the 30s and 40s peak in individual exercise from the much lower figure for people in their 50s.
Coherence and Cohesion
The report follows a logical movement from the overview through the activity categories, although the single-paragraph format limits structural clarity.
Create separate overview and detail paragraphs, grouping television and exercise trends before socialising and cinema.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is adequate and sometimes varied, but repetition of 'spend' and awkward phrases such as 'take parts' and 'in details' reduce naturalness.
Use accurate alternatives such as 'participate,' 'by contrast,' and 'hours devoted to an activity' while avoiding unnecessary passive forms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of sentence structures communicates the comparisons clearly, but errors in verb forms, agreement, and comparative constructions are frequent.
Proofread participles and comparison patterns, correcting forms such as 'hours spent,' 'is spent,' and 'three times as much as.'
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The table below shows the leisure hours by Canadians in a year based on their age groups.
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