The table below shows average hours and minutes spent by UK males and females on different daily activities.
Sample Response
The table data illustrates how much time an average British male and female spendspent on various daily activities. It is apparentIt is apparently seen that sleeping consumesconsume the largest amount of time each dayhighest duration of a day while leisure and professional activities involve a notable portion of their time. Moreover, females do more houseworkhouse works and childrearing than males do on a daily basis. As can be seen, an average British male sleeps and rests just over 8 hours a day while females' sleeping and resting timefemale’s sleeping and resting time is slightly higher than that. A similar pattern could be observed in the time British people spend on personal careon the duration of personal care by British. Further, men spenda male takes an hour and 25 minutes to enjoy their meals while women spend six minutes lessit is 6 minutes shorter for their counterparts. Looking further, men spend 5 hours and 25 minutes5:25 hours to enjoy their leisure activities while it is around 28 minutes less for females. Watching TV and enjoying music is a popular pastime activity among British as they spend over half of their leisure timetimes on that. They spend less time reading or participating in sports than they do for watching TV and listening to music. Men spend 3 hours and 45 minutes a day for professional and academic purposes, more than the time females spend on these activitiesfemales involvement on this. However, females devote more time for houseworkhousehold works, childcare and voluntary works, roughly 4 hours, compared to almost half of that by men. Finally, British travel for nearly 1 and half hour daily and men spendemploy slightly more time doing it than that of females.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response gives a clear overview and covers most major male-female contrasts with generally accurate figures, especially for sleep, leisure, employment, and domestic work. Its main limitation is recurring grammatical and collocational awkwardness, alongside minor numerical imprecision in the leisure comparison. Prioritise accurate comparative calculations and revise agreement, possessives, articles, and prepositions so the otherwise well-selected information reads more naturally and precisely.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response selects the major patterns and reports most figures accurately, although the overall leisure gap is 32 minutes rather than 28 and some generalisations are approximate.
Check every calculated difference against the table and state that television and music account for about half of leisure time.
Coherence and Cohesion
The report moves coherently through daily activities and uses comparisons effectively, but all stages are compressed into one long paragraph.
Use a separate overview and group the detailed comparisons into leisure and work or domestic categories.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is varied enough to describe time use and comparisons, though phrases such as sleeping consume, house works, and employ time are inaccurate or unnatural.
Prefer precise collocations such as sleep accounts for, housework, spend time on, and devote time to.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex structures are attempted and meaning remains clear, but errors in agreement, possessives, articles, pronouns, and comparison forms occur frequently.
Edit systematically for singular-plural control and possessive forms, especially in sentences comparing males with females.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The table below shows average hours and minutes spent by UK males and females on different daily activities.
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