The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Sample Response
The graph shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Overall, the number of tourists increased steadily from 2010 to 2017. Visitors had two choices to visit the island, staying on cruise ships or staying on the island.staying on island. They both increased gradually despite some fluctuations. In 2010, 1 million tourists visitedtraveled the island. By contrast, the highest number of tourists was 3.5 million in 2017. Its figures increased by 2.5 millionincreased 2 million tourists during 7 years. Furthermore, the number of visitors staying on island rose from 0.75 million to 1.5 million before falling to 1.25 million. In addition, more visitors chose to stay on island to travel the island before 2015. The number of visitors staying on cruise ships overtook the number of visitors staying on island and remained higher for the following two yearsfor following 2 years. In 2017, there were 2 million visitors staying on cruise ships. It accounted for overabove 50% of the total visitors.
Why this response received Band 6.0
文章成功概括了折线图的主要趋势并包含了清晰的总体概述，准确指出了邮轮游客与岛上住宿游客的关键交汇点。然而，正文段落存在个别数据计算偏差（总数增量计算有误），且语法结构和词汇表达较为单一、重复。首要提升方向是精简机械连接词，并提高数据描述的精准度与句式多样性。
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
任务完成度
包含明确的总体概述并指出了关键趋势与数据交点，但存在个别数据计算不准确的情况（如总人数从100万增至350万，增量应为250万而非200万）。
仔细核对图形起始与终点数据，确保数据增量和比例计算准确无误。
连贯与衔接
文章结构清晰且逻辑顺畅，但段落衔接过度依赖如 Furthermore、In addition 等机械连接词。
增加句间逻辑衔接的自然过渡，多使用代词指代和从句结构来替代单调的连接词。
词汇资源
词汇使用能够表达基本意思，但表达方式较为单一且频繁重复题目原文短语（如 staying on island 和 staying on cruise ships）。
积累并使用更丰富的同义替换词汇（如 hotel guests、boarders、ship passengers 等）来提高词汇多样性。
语法多样性与准确性
表达大意清晰，但存在冠词缺失、介词搭配不当（如 for following 2 years 缺少定冠词）以及句式表达较硬的情况。
加强对冠词（the）及时间介词短语的准确使用，并尝试结合复合句来丰富句式结构。
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
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