The line graph shows the number of first-time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
Sample Response
The chart illustrates the commuters who visited and returned from Caryl island for the first time in over eight years.
Overall, it is immediately apparent from the chart that the intensity of the visitors who got back from the IslandIsland gradually surged over the years, while the trend of first-time commuters seemed positive in the last few years.
In the tale, those individuals who visited IslandIsland for the first time begin at 8000 in the year 2000. Unfortunately, this value plummeted by 4000 after two years. Surprisingly the negative trend turned into positive and surged the visitors over the years with shares at 10,000 in 2006, Following this amount steadily fairly inclined at touching the barrier of 12,000 years.
Furthermore, travellers who returned from acryl island began at nearby in 3000 in the initial year, and this number skyrocketed to 10,000 in two years; it was a massive inclination observed in commuters. Therefore, the pace of visitors got back from the IslandIsland continuously soared over the years and this figure lept to 15,000 into 2006, but there was a small declination captured in visitors, which crashed by 1000 number in the final year.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Refer to the chart Original: tale Suggested revision: chart Why it matters: Tale refers to a story and is inappropriate for describing graphical data.
- 2. Correct the island name Original: visited IslandIsland for the first time Suggested revision: visited Caryl Island for the first time Why it matters: The place name is Caryl Island and should not be duplicated.
- 3. Use past tense Original: begin Suggested revision: began Why it matters: The description refers to a completed period beginning in 2000, so past tense is required.
- 4. Format the number Original: at 8000 Suggested revision: at 8,000 Why it matters: A comma makes this four-digit figure easier to read consistently.
- 5. Remove subjective judgement Original: Unfortunately, Suggested revision: Delete Why it matters: Task 1 should report the decrease objectively without judging it as unfortunate.
- 6. Keep the tone objective Original: Surprisingly the Suggested revision: The Why it matters: The chart provides no basis for describing this reversal as surprising.
- 7. Fix the trend phrase Original: turned into positive Suggested revision: reversed Why it matters: A trend reverses; it does not turn into positive without a noun such as a trend.
- 8. Use an intransitive verb Original: surged the visitors Suggested revision: visitor numbers rose Why it matters: Surge is not used transitively to mean increasing the visitors in this sentence.
- 9. Correct the 2006 figure Original: with shares at 10,000 in 2006, Suggested revision: , reaching 9,000 in 2006. Why it matters: The first-time visitor line reaches about 9,000 in 2006, and shares is the wrong term for visitor totals.
- 10. Correct the place name Original: acryl island Suggested revision: Caryl Island Why it matters: The chart identifies the destination as Caryl Island.
- 11. Fix the approximation phrase Original: began at nearby in 3000 Suggested revision: began at about 3,000 Why it matters: About should directly precede the approximate figure without nearby or in.
- 12. Describe the increase clearly Original: a massive inclination observed in commuters Suggested revision: a substantial increase in returning visitors Why it matters: Inclination and commuters do not accurately describe the rise in visitor numbers.
Suggested Rewrites
- tale chart
- visited IslandIsland for the first time visited Caryl Island for the first time
- begin began
- at 8000 at 8,000
- Unfortunately, Delete
- Surprisingly the The
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response identifies the broad rise in both visitor groups and supports the account with several relevant figures, so its central message remains understandable. Its main limitation is frequent inaccurate or unnatural language, which sometimes obscures comparisons and is compounded by imprecise values and a weak overview. The priority is to state the two overall trends and their final comparison clearly, then report each data point using simple, accurate trend language.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The main trends and several figures are covered, but the overview is vague and some values and comparisons are inaccurate or omitted.
Give a precise overview noting that returning visitors overtook first-time visitors, peaked in 2006, and remained higher in 2008.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response uses a recognisable introduction-overview-detail structure, but progression within paragraphs is weakened by awkward linking and unclear sentences.
Organise each visitor group chronologically and use simple connectors only where the relationship between figures is explicit.
Lexical Resource
There is some range in trend vocabulary, but frequent misuse of words such as 'commuters,' 'intensity,' and 'declination' reduces precision.
Use accurate chart terms consistently, including visitors, rose, fell, peaked, and declined.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Both simple and complex forms are attempted, but frequent agreement, tense, article, and sentence-structure errors reduce clarity.
Use controlled past-tense sentences with clear subjects and verbs, then check agreement and sentence boundaries throughout.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The line graph shows the number of first-time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
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