The Diagrams below show changes in a cinema from 1980 until now,
Sample Response
The yielded two pictures illustrates the changes in a cinema from 1980 and nowadays.
Overall, it can be clearly seen that after advancement cinema screen rise and more shops build.
In 1980, in the north, left to the right side used as car parking and the entrance was on the south centre direction. Two cinema 2 was on below car parking, and another was on the left side of the entry point. Opposite cinema 2 was the male and female toilet. The right side of the entry had tickets, and next to it was drinks.
After development nowadays, no made changes in the entrance, ticket collection and male and female toilet. However, cinema increased to 5, cinema 2 moves to the north-west corner, next to the toilet, is cinema 1, relocated in the northeast corner new cinema 3 constructed and in the south direction next to cinema 4 and 5 respectively. Food drinks shifted to the bottom left corner and alongside has relaxed room. DVD shops developed in drinks area.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use accurate noun Original: yielded two pictures Suggested revision: two diagrams Why it matters: The phrase is unnatural, and diagrams accurately describes the two layouts.
- 2. Fix subject agreement Original: illustrates Suggested revision: illustrate Why it matters: The plural subject two diagrams requires the plural verb illustrate.
- 3. Correct time range Original: from 1980 and nowadays Suggested revision: between 1980 and the present Why it matters: Use between with two time points and a noun phrase for the current period.
- 4. Remove incorrect number Original: Two cinema 2 Suggested revision: Cinema 2 Why it matters: The room label is Cinema 2, so the preceding number makes the noun phrase ungrammatical.
- 5. Remove extra preposition Original: was on below Suggested revision: was below Why it matters: Below directly expresses the location and does not take on here.
- 6. Name the screen Original: another Suggested revision: Cinema 1 Why it matters: The diagram identifies the room to the left of the entrance as Cinema 1.
- 7. Fix agreement and plurals Original: cinema 2 was the male and female toilet Suggested revision: Cinema 2 were the male and female toilets Why it matters: The two toilet facilities require a plural noun and verb after the inverted location phrase.
- 8. Name the facility Original: had tickets Suggested revision: contained the ticket office Why it matters: Tickets describes items, whereas the diagram labels a ticket facility.
- 9. Complete noun phrase Original: was drinks Suggested revision: was the drinks area Why it matters: Drinks needs a determiner and facility noun in this location description.
- 10. Use clear time marker Original: After development nowadays Suggested revision: In the current layout Why it matters: This phrase clearly introduces the present-day plan without redundant time expressions.
- 11. Fix clause structure Original: no made changes in Suggested revision: there were no changes to Why it matters: An existential clause is needed to state that these facilities remained unchanged.
- 12. Use facility names Original: ticket collection and male and female toilet Suggested revision: the ticket office and male and female toilets Why it matters: The diagram shows a ticket office and two toilet facilities, requiring accurate nouns and plural marking.
Suggested Rewrites
- yielded two pictures two diagrams
- illustrates illustrate
- from 1980 and nowadays between 1980 and the present
- Two cinema 2 Cinema 2
- was on below was below
- another Cinema 1
Why this response received Band 5.0
The response’s clearest strength is its basic chronological organisation and its identification of the cinema’s expansion from two screens to five. However, frequent grammatical and word-choice errors obscure several descriptions, while the overview omits the removal of the car park and the addition of leisure and retail facilities; prioritise a precise overview, then describe each major relocation and replacement in clear, controlled sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response identifies the increase from two cinemas to five and several relocations, but its vague overview omits the loss of the car park and some details are unclear.
State the two main transformations clearly—the car park being replaced by extra screens and the addition or relocation of customer facilities—before comparing specific positions.
Coherence and Cohesion
The four-paragraph, past-versus-present structure gives basic progression, but the final paragraph becomes a difficult sequence of loosely connected locations.
Group the present-day changes by screens and customer facilities, using one clearly linked sentence for each group.
Lexical Resource
Some relevant map vocabulary is attempted, including ‘relocated’ and ‘corner’, but frequent inappropriate choices such as ‘after advancement’ and ‘relaxed room’ reduce precision.
Use standard map-report phrases such as ‘was replaced by’, ‘was relocated to’, and ‘a relaxation room was added’.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Frequent errors in agreement, articles, verb forms, and sentence structure regularly strain meaning, especially in the description of the current layout.
Build shorter sentences with a clear subject and finite verb, then check singular-plural agreement and passive forms throughout.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The Diagrams below show changes in a cinema from 1980 until now,
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