The map below shows a civic centre between the present and its plan.
Sample Response
The yielded diagram demonstrates a civil centre present-day view and plans.
Overall, it can be seen that it will improve provision and build underground places that are not currently available after advancement. In addition, the left side of the centre is the high street and smith street on the right side. North Avenue is in the top direction, while the opposite side has victoria avenue.
Currently, the northern top centre has a cinema and car parking is on both sides. The exhibition location is on the southeast corner, the western side next to council offices and town hall. Moreover, the library is on the southwest corner while the top of the direction is the shopping centre area.
In future, cinema and shopping centres will remain in the same location. However, the cafe will take northeast corner car parking place and hotel& restaurant another parking. The underground library will develop in council offices, and it shifts to exhibition location. Furthermore, the exhibition will have in smith streets south corner. New underground car parking will build in the town hall.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use civic centre Original: civil Suggested revision: civic Why it matters: The task describes a civic centre, while civil centre is not the correct term here.
- 2. Clarify map periods Original: present-day view and plans Suggested revision: current layout and proposed plan Why it matters: This wording distinguishes the existing site from the future proposal more precisely.
- 3. Capitalise street name Original: the high street Suggested revision: High Street Why it matters: The article is unnecessary and the proper street name requires capitals.
- 4. Capitalise street name Original: smith street Suggested revision: Smith Street Why it matters: Proper street names require initial capital letters.
- 5. Use map direction Original: in the top direction Suggested revision: to the north Why it matters: Map locations are conventionally described with compass directions.
- 6. Capitalise avenue name Original: victoria avenue Suggested revision: Victoria Avenue Why it matters: The proper avenue name requires initial capital letters.
- 7. Clarify location Original: northern top centre Suggested revision: northern side of the centre Why it matters: The original phrase does not express the cinema's location naturally or clearly.
- 8. Use plural noun Original: car parking is on both sides Suggested revision: car parks are on both sides Why it matters: The map shows two countable car parks, so a plural noun and verb are required.
- 9. Correct library position Original: southwest Suggested revision: southeast Why it matters: The current map places the library in the southeast corner below the shopping centre.
- 10. Use singular form Original: centres Suggested revision: centre Why it matters: Only one shopping centre is shown in the plans.
- 11. Clarify replacement Original: will take northeast corner car parking place Suggested revision: will replace the northeastern car park Why it matters: The revised phrase clearly states what the cafe will replace.
- 12. Complete the clause Original: hotel& restaurant another parking Suggested revision: the hotel and restaurant will replace the other car park Why it matters: The original phrase lacks a finite verb and uses an incorrect noun for the car park.
Suggested Rewrites
- civil civic
- present-day view and plans current layout and proposed plan
- the high street High Street
- smith street Smith Street
- in the top direction to the north
- victoria avenue Victoria Avenue
Why this response received Band 5.0
The response identifies several present and planned features and uses a sensible present-versus-future structure. However, the overview is vague and the report repeatedly mislocates facilities, including the exhibition, library, cafe, and planned hotel, while awkward sentence construction sometimes obscures the intended changes. The priority is to verify each compass position against the maps and describe every relocation with a clear subject, origin, and destination.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response covers both maps and mentions several changes, but its overview is imprecise and multiple facilities are placed in the wrong corners.
Check every location against the compass points and clearly state which facilities remain, move, replace car parks, or become underground.
Coherence and Cohesion
The present-versus-future paragraph structure gives the report broad progression, although faulty referencing and unclear sentence links interrupt the flow.
Describe one change per sentence and use precise references such as the former exhibition site instead of ambiguous pronouns.
Lexical Resource
There is some relevant map vocabulary, but frequent unsuitable choices and collocations such as yielded diagram, civil centre, and improve provision reduce precision.
Use standard map-reporting phrases such as is located, will be replaced by, will move to, and will remain unchanged.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mixture of structures is attempted, but frequent article, preposition, word-form, and passive-voice errors often make relationships difficult to follow.
Practise complete future passive clauses with articles and prepositions, for example, A cafe will be built on the former car-park site.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The map below shows a civic centre between the present and its plan.
Your response
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