The plans below show a college café before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Sample Response
This picures describes a college cafe view before and after reconstruction.
Overall, we could see some major changes. Tables and chair area modified significulty. Some new section added and existing rebuilt. The new outdoor area appeared.
First picture shows the care before redesign. We could see a kitchen in the top right corner near to the top wall if you walk from the entrance door. There was a smal serving area for all food and drinks inside it. Tables and chairs were located in the middle of the cafe. Staff dining rooms were assebled to the main area. Toilets were located in the left bottom side. The bin stand between toilets and main door.
Second image presents how cafe looks today. Kitchen area was not replaced. However, serving area was replaced by Hot meals area. Staff dining rooms were redisigned. First room now the Take away food area, second the coffe bar. Toilets was not changed, but one bin became a group of recycling bins. We could see salad bar added to the tables area. Two new doors appeared. These are the doors to the outdoor seating space. Barbecue section was constructed to this area.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Plural verb agreement Original: picures describes Suggested revision: pictures describe Why it matters: The plural subject 'pictures' requires the plural verb form 'describe'.
- 2. Incorrect word choice Original: view Suggested revision: layout Why it matters: 'Layout' or 'plan' is more accurate than 'view' for floor plans.
- 3. Plural noun needed Original: chair Suggested revision: chairs Why it matters: The original diagram labels this feature as 'Tables and chairs'.
- 4. Spelling error Original: significulty Suggested revision: significantly Why it matters: Correct the spelling of 'significantly'.
- 5. Missing verb and plural Original: section added Suggested revision: sections were added Why it matters: Passive structures need a form of 'be', and 'some' requires a plural noun here.
- 6. Missing passive verb Original: existing rebuilt Suggested revision: existing ones were rebuilt Why it matters: Add the pronoun 'ones' and the auxiliary verb 'were' for passive voice.
- 7. Spelling error Original: care Suggested revision: café Why it matters: 'Care' is a misspelling of 'café' in this context.
- 8. Spelling error Original: smal Suggested revision: small Why it matters: Correct the spelling of 'small'.
- 9. Spelling error Original: assebled Suggested revision: attached Why it matters: Fix the misspelling and use 'attached' or 'adjacent' to accurately describe location.
- 10. Past tense verb Original: stand Suggested revision: stood Why it matters: Use the past tense 'stood' to remain consistent with the rest of the past paragraph.
- 11. Missing article Original: presents how cafe Suggested revision: presents how the café Why it matters: Insert the definite article 'the' before the singular noun 'café'.
- 12. Spelling error Original: redisigned Suggested revision: redesigned Why it matters: Correct the spelling of 'redesigned'.
Suggested Rewrites
- picures describes pictures describe
- view layout
- chair chairs
- significulty significantly
- section added sections were added
- existing rebuilt existing ones were rebuilt
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response successfully identifies the key structural developments in the café layout and includes a clear overview paragraph. However, persistent grammatical inaccuracies and frequent spelling errors reduce overall clarity and precision. Prioritizing correct verb tenses, passive forms, and basic spelling will yield the highest immediate improvements in overall readability.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
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Task Achievement
The main changes between the two plans are identified, and a general overview of the redesign is provided.
Ensure spatial descriptions are accurate by double-checking locations against the map layout (e.g., toilets are in the bottom right corner, not bottom left).
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay follows a logical progression from the overview to descriptions of the past and present layouts.
Use more varied transition words instead of simple formulaic stage markers like 'First picture shows' and 'Second image presents'.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is sufficient to convey the visual information, but frequent spelling mistakes and limited word choices are present.
Carefully review basic vocabulary spelling (e.g., 'pictures', 'significantly', 'small', 'coffee') before finishing the report.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Multiple grammatical errors occur in sentence structure, verb agreement, and passive voice formations.
Practice forming complete passive sentences (e.g., 'a new section was added') and ensuring subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'toilets were not changed').
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The plans below show a college café before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
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