The illustration below shows the proportions of people living in different types of houses in three different areas in 2012 in Denmark.
Sample Response
The table data compares people’s accommodation in Green Park area, Central area and Central Park area in Denmark in 2012. The types of accommodation listed are terrace houses, semi-detached houses, detached houses and bungalows. Overall, Green park inhabitants preferred terrace houses, while most of the citizens in the Central area lived in terrace-houses and bungalows while the main housing type in Central Park area was Bungalows. According to the table data, the two-third populace in Green Park area in Denmark lived in terrace houses in 2012. 15% lived in detached houses while the remaining 10% were equally distributed in semi-terrace houses and Bungalows. Again, Terrance houses and Bungalows were the two most common housing types in the Central area with 45% and 35% dwellers respectively. 15% people in this area were in semi-detached houses and the remaining in detached houses. Finally, Bungalows were the primary accommodation type in Central Park are with 65% dwellers. One-quarter residents preferred terrace houses and the remaining one-tenth people lived in either a semi-detached or a detached house.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Describe residence accurately Original: Green park inhabitants preferred terrace houses Suggested revision: Green Park residents mainly lived in terrace houses Why it matters: The table reports proportions of residents rather than their preferences, and the place name needs capitalization.
- 2. Remove incorrect hyphen Original: terrace-houses Suggested revision: terrace houses Why it matters: The standard housing term is written without a hyphen.
- 3. Clarify the contrast Original: bungalows while the main housing type Suggested revision: bungalows, whereas the main housing type Why it matters: A comma and contrasting linker make the shift to Central Park clearer.
- 4. Match singular noun Original: was Bungalows Suggested revision: was the bungalow Why it matters: The singular phrase “housing type” requires a singular complement.
- 5. Correct the proportion Original: the two-third populace Suggested revision: three-quarters of the population Why it matters: The table shows 75% for terrace houses in Green Park.
- 6. Add the article Original: Green Park area in Denmark Suggested revision: the Green Park area in Denmark Why it matters: This specific named area requires the definite article in this sentence.
- 7. Use correct pairing Original: equally distributed in Suggested revision: evenly split between Why it matters: “Between” correctly introduces the two housing categories sharing the remaining proportion.
- 8. Correct housing term Original: semi-terrace houses and Bungalows Suggested revision: semi-detached houses and bungalows Why it matters: The visual labels the category as semi-detached houses, and the common noun needs lowercase.
- 9. Correct the spelling Original: Terrance Suggested revision: Terrace Why it matters: “Terrance” is a misspelling of “terrace.”
- 10. Use lowercase noun Original: Bungalows Suggested revision: bungalows Why it matters: A common housing-type noun is not capitalized mid-sentence.
- 11. Express percentages clearly Original: with 45% and 35% dwellers respectively Suggested revision: accounting for 45% and 35% of residents, respectively Why it matters: Percentages apply to the residents rather than directly modifying “dwellers.”
- 12. Add percentage structure Original: 15% people Suggested revision: 15% of people Why it matters: A percentage before a noun requires “of.”
Suggested Rewrites
- Green park inhabitants preferred terrace houses Green Park residents mainly lived in terrace houses
- terrace-houses terrace houses
- bungalows while the main housing type bungalows, whereas the main housing type
- was Bungalows was the bungalow
- the two-third populace three-quarters of the population
- Green Park area in Denmark the Green Park area in Denmark
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response gives a clear overview and covers nearly all categories, with most figures and comparisons accurately selected. Its main weakness is precision: Green Park terrace housing is reported as about two thirds rather than 75%, while several awkward or incorrect noun phrases reduce fluency. Prioritise exact data reporting and revise article, plural, and quantifier constructions.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A clear overview and almost complete coverage are provided, but the principal Green Park figure is inaccurately reported as two thirds instead of 75%.
Verify every percentage against the table and state the 75% Green Park terrace-house share exactly.
Coherence and Cohesion
The information progresses logically from an overview to the three areas, although the single-paragraph presentation and repeated linking are less polished.
Separate the overview from the detailed comparisons and vary links to avoid repeated use of while.
Lexical Resource
The response uses a reasonably varied housing vocabulary, but misspellings and awkward choices such as semi-terrace houses reduce precision.
Use the chart labels consistently and proofread terms such as terraced, semi-detached, and bungalow.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of sentence structures communicates the comparisons clearly, despite recurring errors with quantifiers, articles, agreement, and noun phrases.
Practise accurate percentage structures such as 15% of people and one quarter of residents.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The illustration below shows the proportions of people living in different types of houses in three different areas in 2012 in Denmark.
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