The table below shows the sales at a small restaurant in a downtown business district.
Sample Response
The table shows the sales figuresvolume of breakfast, lunch and dinner in a restaurant for seven days, from November 10 to 16 to be more specific. A glance at the data shows that the amount of dinner salesdinner sales amount was higher than those for breakfast and lunchthat of breakfast and lunch on averageon an average and sales on weekends were comparatively lower. According to the table data, the restaurant sold $1,175 worth of breakfasteleven hundred dollar’s breakfast on Friday. On that day the lunch and dinner sales of the restaurant were $2400 and more than $3600 respectively. On the whole day, the restaurant’s sale accounted for approximately 7 thousand dollars. The next day the sales amount remained almost the same with over 3800 dollar’s dinner sales. The highest breakfast sales figureThe highest amount of breakfast sales in the week was on Thursday and the restaurant sold $1,452 worth of breakfastover 1450 dollar’s breakfast which is almost twice the breakfast sales amountalmost double than the breakfast sales amount on Sunday. The highest lunch sale was on Wednesday (about $2,595roughly2600 dollar) and that was almost twice the sales on Sundaymore almost double than the sales on Sunday. It is obvious that the sales amount of the restaurant fell on weekends, sales of less than $5,000less than 5 thousand dollars sale on Sunday compared to sales of over $8,000over eight thousand dollars sales on Friday. Dinner sales in most daysmost of the days were higher than the combined breakfast and lunch sales and dinner sales peakedgot a hike on Friday at a record $4,350with the record 4350 dollars.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response identifies the broad sales pattern and several important peaks, with clear comparisons that generally make the report easy to follow. Its main limitation is data accuracy: the Friday breakfast and lunch figures, Friday total, and especially Saturday dinner value are misreported. The highest priority is to verify every figure against the table before using it to support comparisons and daily totals.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A clear overview and several accurate key comparisons are provided, but multiple figures and totals are misreported, particularly for Friday and Saturday.
Cross-check each selected value and calculate daily totals directly from the table before describing trends.
Coherence and Cohesion
The report follows a generally understandable sequence from the overview to daily comparisons, although presenting everything in one paragraph weakens organisation.
Separate the overview from two logically grouped detail paragraphs, such as weekdays and the weekend.
Lexical Resource
There is sufficient vocabulary for trends and comparisons, but several collocations are awkward or inaccurate, including expressions for sales amounts and increases.
Use precise combinations such as sales amounted to, total sales, and reached a weekly peak.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex sentences communicates meaning, but recurring errors with possessives, articles, agreement, and comparative forms reduce control.
Proofread noun phrases and comparisons, especially dollars rather than dollar's and almost twice as high as rather than double than.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The table below shows the sales at a small restaurant in a downtown business district.
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