The table below shows the sales at a small restaurant in a downtown business district.
Sample Response
The table shows the sales volume of breakfast, lunch and dinner in a restaurant for seven days, from November 10 to 16 to be more specific. A glance at the data shows that dinner sales amount was higher than that of breakfast and lunch on an average and sales on weekends were comparatively lower. According to the table data, the restaurant sold eleven hundred dollar’s breakfast on Friday. On that day the lunch and dinner sales of the restaurant were $2400 and more than $3600 respectively. On the whole day, the restaurant’s sale accounted for approximately 7 thousand dollars. The next day the sales amount remained almost the same with over 3800 dollar’s dinner sales. The highest amount of breakfast sales in the week was on Thursday and the restaurant sold over 1450 dollar’s breakfast which is almost double than the breakfast sales amount on Sunday. The highest lunch sale was on Wednesday (roughly2600 dollar) and that was more almost double than the sales on Sunday. It is obvious that the sales amount of the restaurant fell on weekends, less than 5 thousand dollars sale on Sunday compared to over eight thousand dollars sales on Friday. Dinner sales in most of the days were higher than the combined breakfast and lunch sales and dinner sales got a hike on Friday with the record 4350 dollars.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use precise chart term Original: volume Suggested revision: figures Why it matters: The table reports monetary figures rather than a physical volume.
- 2. Fix noun phrase Original: dinner sales amount Suggested revision: the amount of dinner sales Why it matters: This noun phrase needs the amount-of structure.
- 3. Match plural comparison Original: that of breakfast and lunch Suggested revision: those for breakfast and lunch Why it matters: The comparison refers to two plural sales categories.
- 4. Use standard expression Original: on an average Suggested revision: on average Why it matters: On average is the standard expression for a general mean.
- 5. Correct Friday breakfast Original: eleven hundred dollar’s breakfast Suggested revision: $1,175 worth of breakfast Why it matters: The table gives Friday breakfast sales as $1,175.
- 6. State exact Thursday figure Original: over 1450 dollar’s breakfast Suggested revision: $1,452 worth of breakfast Why it matters: Thursday's breakfast figure is exactly $1,452 in the table.
- 7. Fix comparison form Original: almost double than the breakfast sales amount Suggested revision: almost twice the breakfast sales amount Why it matters: Twice does not take than in this comparison.
- 8. Correct lunch figure Original: roughly2600 dollar Suggested revision: about $2,595 Why it matters: The Wednesday lunch value is $2,595 and requires the correct currency form.
- 9. Repair comparison phrase Original: more almost double than the sales on Sunday Suggested revision: almost twice the sales on Sunday Why it matters: The original sequence of comparative words is ungrammatical.
- 10. Fix sales expression Original: less than 5 thousand dollars sale Suggested revision: sales of less than $5,000 Why it matters: The plural noun sales should be followed by of before the amount.
- 11. Fix amount structure Original: over eight thousand dollars sales Suggested revision: sales of over $8,000 Why it matters: Sales of plus an amount is the correct structure here.
- 12. Use concise quantifier Original: most of the days Suggested revision: most days Why it matters: Most days is the natural expression for five of the seven days.
Suggested Rewrites
- volume figures
- dinner sales amount the amount of dinner sales
- that of breakfast and lunch those for breakfast and lunch
- on an average on average
- eleven hundred dollar’s breakfast $1,175 worth of breakfast
- over 1450 dollar’s breakfast $1,452 worth of breakfast
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response identifies the broad sales pattern and several important peaks, with clear comparisons that generally make the report easy to follow. Its main limitation is data accuracy: the Friday breakfast and lunch figures, Friday total, and especially Saturday dinner value are misreported. The highest priority is to verify every figure against the table before using it to support comparisons and daily totals.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A clear overview and several accurate key comparisons are provided, but multiple figures and totals are misreported, particularly for Friday and Saturday.
Cross-check each selected value and calculate daily totals directly from the table before describing trends.
Coherence and Cohesion
The report follows a generally understandable sequence from the overview to daily comparisons, although presenting everything in one paragraph weakens organisation.
Separate the overview from two logically grouped detail paragraphs, such as weekdays and the weekend.
Lexical Resource
There is sufficient vocabulary for trends and comparisons, but several collocations are awkward or inaccurate, including expressions for sales amounts and increases.
Use precise combinations such as sales amounted to, total sales, and reached a weekly peak.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex sentences communicates meaning, but recurring errors with possessives, articles, agreement, and comparative forms reduce control.
Proofread noun phrases and comparisons, especially dollars rather than dollar's and almost twice as high as rather than double than.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The table below shows the sales at a small restaurant in a downtown business district.
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