The diagram shows the relationship between many different languages.
Sample Response
The provided diagram demonstrates the relationship of the different language on a different continent.
Overall, two types of English language, the American English branch and the British English branch. It is spoken in different countries and that countries also speak other languages.
For the American English branch, the majority of this language spoken in two countries, the USA and Canada. Canada has two branches that divided by area, Anglophone Canada and francophone Canada. We can clearly see six branches in the USA; USA region is American Samoa, west coast southern, midwest, north east coast, Puerto Rico and the last one is the Philippines.
For the British English branch, six different countries have west indies, Britishness, Africa, India-Pakistan, Australia and far east. Jamaica and Barbados are two regions for the west indies, whereas west Africa, east Africa and Angelo phone Africa is for Africa territory. In Britishness, four languages Irish, English, Welsh and Scottish, while the form of Indian English spoken in Indian-Pakistan. In Australasia, the territory is speaking in two countries Australia and New Zealand. However, the far east side Malay and the Chinese language spoken.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Correct preposition Original: of Suggested revision: between Why it matters: Between is the appropriate preposition when describing connections among languages.
- 2. Use plural noun Original: the different language Suggested revision: different languages Why it matters: The diagram contains multiple languages and varieties, so the noun must be plural.
- 3. Describe regions accurately Original: on a different continent Suggested revision: across different regions Why it matters: The diagram classifies regional language branches rather than assigning one language to each continent.
- 4. Add finite verb Original: the majority of this language spoken Suggested revision: this branch is spoken mainly Why it matters: The clause needs the finite verb is and a clearer reference to the branch.
- 5. Repair branch description Original: two branches that divided by area, Suggested revision: two regional branches: Why it matters: The original relative clause lacks a passive auxiliary and introduces the labels unclearly.
- 6. Capitalize proper label Original: francophone Suggested revision: Francophone Why it matters: This named branch should begin with a capital letter, as shown in the diagram.
- 7. Correct branch count Original: six Suggested revision: seven Why it matters: The diagram shows seven USA subdivisions, including both American Samoa and the Philippines.
- 8. Use plural agreement Original: USA region is Suggested revision: The USA branches are Why it matters: A plural subject and verb are required before the list of branches.
- 9. Separate branch labels Original: west coast southern Suggested revision: West Coast, Southern Why it matters: West Coast and Southern are two separate USA branches in the diagram.
- 10. Match branch label Original: north east coast Suggested revision: North-East Coast Why it matters: The hyphenated and capitalized form accurately reproduces the diagram's label.
- 11. Correct hierarchy Original: For the British English branch, six different countries have Suggested revision: The British English branch has six main groups: Why it matters: The six labels are language groups or regions, not six countries.
- 12. State relationship precisely Original: Jamaica and Barbados are two regions for the west indies Suggested revision: Jamaica and Barbados are the two West Indies branches Why it matters: The diagram places Jamaica and Barbados directly beneath the West Indies branch.
Suggested Rewrites
- of between
- the different language different languages
- on a different continent across different regions
- the majority of this language spoken this branch is spoken mainly
- two branches that divided by area, two regional branches:
- francophone Francophone
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response's strongest feature is its broad coverage of the two main English branches and many of their subsidiary groups. However, several diagram categories are inaccurately described as countries, regions, or languages, and frequent grammatical errors make some relationships difficult to follow. The highest priority is to describe the hierarchy with exact labels and complete, well-formed sentences that clearly distinguish branches from their examples.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response identifies the two principal branches and reports many lower-level groups, but its overview is limited and several hierarchical relationships are inaccurately classified.
Use the diagram's exact category labels and summarise the main branching pattern before selecting accurate examples from each side.
Coherence and Cohesion
Separate paragraphs for the American and British branches create a sensible progression, though connections within sentences are sometimes unclear or mechanically listed.
Organise each main branch from higher-level groups to lower-level examples and use clear sentence boundaries between distinct relationships.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is adequate for identifying branches, countries, and regions, but frequent inaccurate choices and forms such as Britishness and Angelo phone reduce precision.
Copy proper labels accurately from the diagram and use consistent relational terms such as branch, variety, region, and subgroup.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Frequent errors with missing verbs, articles, agreement, and clause construction occur throughout, although the main meaning is generally recoverable.
Build each description around a complete subject-verb structure, then check articles and singular-plural agreement before adding dependent clauses.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The diagram shows the relationship between many different languages.
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