The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.
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Sample Response
The bar chart compares the proportion of weekly income spent by families acrossaross eight categories on average in 1968 and 2018.
It is obvious that in 1968 food was the largest household expensehighest amount of domestic cost, but the spending on leisure became the top expenditure categorywasting after 50 years. Furthermore, the spending oncost in housing and transport also experienced an increase between 1968 and 2018.
In 1968, food accounted for 35 percentcovered 35 percent of families' weekly bills, morethan three times higher than housing, clothing and footwear, which were each the second highest at about 10%footware which both the second highest part about 10%. In 2018, the weekly domestic spending on leisure overtook food, reaching around 22%spending in leisure overtook the spending on food reached around 22%, while the shares of housing and transporthousing, transport grew from 10% to almost 20%, 10% to around 15% respectively.
The other four categoriesparts of weekly family expenditure, except forwithout household goods which remained stable at around 8%, dropped slightly in this period of time. Fuel and power showedfaced a decline from 6% to 4%. Clothing and footware had a decreasedescent from 10% to 5%, whereas personal goods droppeddopped by a similar amount from 8% to 4%.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The report effectively identifies key trends and provides a clear comparative overview of household expenditure between 1968 and 2018. However, word choice is occasionally inaccurate or inappropriate, and grammatical errors in complex sentence structures reduce clarity. To improve, refine awkward phrasing and focus on precise data comparisons and sentence grammar.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response presents a clear overview and highlights main features, though some specific data descriptions are slightly imprecise.
Ensure all comparative descriptions and numeric statements precisely reflect the visual data without ambiguous phrasing.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is organized logically across paragraphs, but some cohesive devices and sentence connectors feel mechanical or clumsy.
Use natural transitions and logical referents to connect detailed comparative points smoothly within paragraphs.
Lexical Resource
A range of vocabulary is attempted, though inappropriate word choices and minor spelling mistakes lower precision.
Focus on accurate academic collocations for describing trends and eliminate inappropriate word choices.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A combination of simple and complex structures is attempted, but frequent grammatical errors occur in complex clauses.
Strengthen clause structure accuracy, particularly when combining relative clauses and prepositional phrases.