The diagrams below show changes in Felixstone in the UK between 1967 and 2001.
Sample Response
The diagrams show the changes that occurredgive information on the transformations which occurred in the area of Felixstone in the UKBritish city of Felixstone between 1967 andto 2001. In general, it can be seen that the area gained several new facilitieshas had many new facilities added, while some existing features were removedwhile others were removed.
Looking closely at the mapsgraph, several major changes occurredthere were a few major modifications. Firstly, farmland in the northeast of the city has been transformed into a residential area, complete with a hotel, swimming pool as well as two tennis courts. Meanwhile, the fish market on the other side of the road has also been replaced by a private beach. ShopsHouses previously reserved for shops on the right of the high street were replacedhave also now been replaced by apartments. In the southwest of the city, four wind turbines were installedthere have been four wind turbines installed, south of the dune, near the seafrontjust below the dunes and right in front of the sea.
Next to the dunes, a new car park was added besidea new parking lot has been retrofitted to accompany the hotel that had already been built in 1967 - this, along with the adjacent cafécoffeeshop, remained unchanged. The Marina Pier that sat opposite the coffee shop in the same year was removedhad also been removed, with a public beach in its place. Lastly, the large golf course in the northwest of the city remained unchangedhad not been altered.
Why this response received Band 7.5
The response gives a well-organised and largely comprehensive account of the principal changes, including the new beaches, turbines, apartments, leisure facilities, and car park, while also noting features that remained. The overview is rather general, and a few descriptions are imprecise, particularly the claim about two tennis courts and the awkward account of the shops. Make the overview more specific and keep every location and facility label exact.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
Most significant changes and unchanged features are accurately covered, but the overview lacks specific synthesis and a small number of map details are misstated.
Summarise the overall shift toward tourism and housing, and accurately distinguish the single tennis court, apartments, and retained shop.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information progresses logically from major redevelopment to additions, removals, and unchanged features, with effective paragraphing and generally clear referencing.
Organise details even more consistently by map area or by changed versus unchanged features to remove minor shifts in focus.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is varied and generally precise, though graph, city, houses previously reserved for shops, and retrofitted are not the most natural choices here.
Use exact map-reporting terms such as diagrams, town, shops were replaced, and a car park was added.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A wide range of complex structures is handled accurately, with only occasional errors or awkward constructions that do not impede meaning.
Correct small form issues such as between 1967 and 2001 and keep the historical time frame consistently in the past.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The diagrams below show changes in Felixstone in the UK between 1967 and 2001.
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