The graphs below show the total percentage of films released and the total percentage of ticket sales in a country in 1996 and 2000.
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The two bar charts compare the proportion of movies produced with the share of cinema admissionsillustrate the total percentage of films released and the total percentage of ticket sales in a country in 1996 and 2000.
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In 1996, drama had the highest release percentage,In 1996, drama released the highest in 1996, accounting for nearlyneraly 26%, which was approximately 9 percentage points lower than the figure in 2000while approximately 9 percantage points lower than that figure in 2000. However, the percentage of drama ticket sales accounted for around 16%, still nearly 4 percantage points less than the figure for comedy.the figures of comedy.
Although the percentagespercantages of the drama, comedy and fantasy in 1996 were less than those figures in 2000, the two years accounted for the same share of romance, approximately 6%. In addition, the percentageBesides, the percantage of romanceromant cinema tickets only made up about 3% in 2000, approximately 7 percantage points lower than that figure in 1996. DeleteHowever, the fig
Why this response received Band 5.0
The response identifies key main trends and provides a clear overall overview comparing film releases and ticket sales across genres. However, accuracy is severely compromised by inverted comparisons and an unfinished final sentence that leaves key data unaddressed. To improve, focus on double-checking chart trends before writing and ensure complete sentence structures across all paragraphs.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
An overview is present, but the body paragraphs contain inaccurate trend descriptions and end abruptly with an unfinished thought.
Verify all numeric trends against the charts carefully before writing to ensure that increases and decreases are reported correctly.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is arranged in basic paragraphs, but the abrupt ending disrupts logical progression and structural completion.
Manage time effectively to finish every sentence and provide a complete paragraph structure.
Lexical Resource
The response uses adequate vocabulary for basic reporting, but spelling mistakes and word formation errors recur throughout the text.
Review basic word endings and correct repeated spelling errors such as 'percantage' and 'romant'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex sentence structures is attempted, but frequent grammatical errors and a truncated final clause obscure meaning.
Focus on correct past tense verb forms and ensure every sentence is grammatically complete.