The Diagram Shows How Tea Leaves Are Processed Into Five Tea Types.
Sample Response
The given diagram describes how tea is made out. According to the figure, tea leaves need to undergo a five process before being converted into a dry state of powder that we use.
The first step illustrates that when a leaf has a better growth rate, there is plucking sent for withering. The white tea only needs one process, i.e., oven drying. Moreover, there have been further three steps after withering, which are steaming, rolling, and drying, and after that, green tea is prepared for selling.
Although the process of oolong tea and large leaf black tea is similar, there has been a difference in fermentation, such as in the preparation of oolong tea; it includes the small fermentation while on the other side, full fermentation is there. Furthermore, there has been the inclusion of crushing in small leaf tea, which further involves a full fermentation and drying process and finally gets reading for the market.
So this is the end of the AC Writing Task 1 ( The Diagram Shows How Tea Leaves Are Processed Into Five Tea Types.)
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use production verb Original: made out Suggested revision: produced Why it matters: 'Produced' is the appropriate verb for describing a manufacturing process.
- 2. Fix noun phrase Original: a five process Suggested revision: a series of processes Why it matters: The article and numeral do not form a grammatical modifier for 'process'.
- 3. Describe output accurately Original: dry state of powder Suggested revision: range of dried tea products Why it matters: The diagram shows five dried tea types, not a single powdered output.
- 4. Use formal wording Original: that we use Suggested revision: for consumption Why it matters: The revision removes the informal personal reference.
- 5. Remove unnecessary article Original: The white tea Suggested revision: White tea Why it matters: No definite article is needed when referring to the tea type generally.
- 6. Clarify additional stage Original: one process, i.e., oven drying Suggested revision: one further stage: oven drying Why it matters: Oven drying follows the common growth, plucking and withering stages.
- 7. Fix word order Original: there have been further three steps Suggested revision: there are three further stages Why it matters: The quantity must precede 'further' in this structure, and the present tense suits the diagram.
- 8. Name oven drying Original: drying, and after that, Suggested revision: oven drying, after which Why it matters: The diagram labels the final stage as oven drying.
- 9. Use precise outcome Original: prepared for selling Suggested revision: produced Why it matters: The diagram shows the production of green tea rather than a selling stage.
- 10. Clarify stage sequence Original: there has been the inclusion of crushing in small leaf tea, which further involves Suggested revision: crushing is used for small-leaf black tea and is followed by Why it matters: The revision creates a clear passive sequence and correctly names the tea type.
- 11. Remove article Original: a full fermentation Suggested revision: full fermentation Why it matters: 'Fermentation' is uncountable when naming this processing stage.
- 12. Specify oven drying Original: drying process Suggested revision: oven drying Why it matters: The final stage is specifically labelled oven drying in the diagram.
Suggested Rewrites
- made out produced
- a five process a series of processes
- dry state of powder range of dried tea products
- that we use for consumption
- The white tea White tea
- one process, i.e., oven drying one further stage: oven drying
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response follows the process broadly from shared preparation to the five tea types and includes several important branch differences. Its main limitation is clarity and accuracy: the opening gives an unclear process count, the overview is weak, and frequent awkward grammatical and lexical choices obscure some stages. Prioritise a precise overview of the shared stages and branching methods, then describe each route in controlled process language.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
Most routes are covered and key distinctions such as steaming, crushing and degrees of fermentation are mentioned, but the overview is unclear and some descriptions are inaccurate.
State that all leaves are grown, plucked and withered before different combinations of steaming, rolling, crushing and fermentation lead to oven drying.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response progresses from common initial stages to individual tea types, although some connections are awkward and the closing sentence adds no process information.
Organise the body by shared stages and branching routes, and omit the formulaic final sentence.
Lexical Resource
There is enough process vocabulary to communicate the main sequence, but several inappropriate collocations reduce precision.
Replace expressions such as 'made out', 'small fermentation' and 'gets reading' with 'produced', 'slight fermentation' and 'becomes ready'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex sentences are attempted, but frequent errors in articles, verb forms and clause construction sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow.
Use shorter active or passive process sentences and check article and agreement patterns such as 'five processes' and 'three further steps'.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The Diagram Shows How Tea Leaves Are Processed Into Five Tea Types.
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