The graph below shows the production of three forest industry products in a European country, namely timber, pulp and paper, from 1980 to 2000.
Sample Response
The line graph illustratesinllustrates the production of timber, pulp and paper industry products in a European country between 1980 and 2000.
Overall, paper continued to increase throughout the period, while pulp production rose overall despite a temporary dip in 1990during the period, while pulp kept rising almost all the period, except a decrease in 1985. On the other hand, timber showed a fluctuating trend over the two decades.timber fluctuated during the period.
In 1980, paper production was lower than that of timber and pulp, standing at only 3 million tonnes (or units)In 1908, paper was less than timber and pulp, where pulp only made up 3%, 1 unit lower than pulp1% point less than pulp and half that of timberand half of timber. However, due to the increase of paper, paper overtook pulp in 1985, reaching 5 million tonnesrepresenting 5%, and then surpassed timber in 1991, reaching approximately 7.5 million tonnes.accounting for around 7.5%. Afterwards, paper climbedclimbing to a high of 10 million tonnes in 2000.to a peak of 10% in 2000.
Furthermore, timber production remained consistently higher than pulp production throughout the periodtimber was higher than pulp during the period. After the increase to a peak of 9 units in 1985to a peak of 7% in 1985, timber experienced a prolonged declinea long time decrease, from the top to around 6.5 units in 1995to nearly 7% in 1995. Then it rose to around 7.5% at last. Pulp production stood at 4 million tonnes in 1980Pulp began to rise at 4% in 1908, reached a peak of 5% in 1985, then decreased to approximately 4.5% in 1990. After that, it continued to rise to 6% in 2000.
Why this response received Band 5.0
文章包含清晰的总体趋势概述,并对三种产品的变化过程进行了分段描述。然而,主要问题在于数据精准度较低,误将纵轴数据当作百分比,且多次将年份误写为1908年,同时存在语法断句与数据对比混乱的问题。最需要优先改进的是仔细核对图表刻度单位与数据真实值,确保信息传达准确。
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
任务完成度
文章包含基本概述并涵盖了三种产品的发展趋势,但误将纵轴数值写为百分比,且出现1985年木材峰值数据错误及年份误写。
仔细核对图表纵轴的真实单位与具体数值,避免混淆百分比与数量单位,确保数据引用精准。
连贯与衔接
文章采用了按时间与产品分类的分段方式,但部分比较句式逻辑混乱,导致局部语义不够连贯。
合理使用逻辑连接词与对照句式,确保对象指代清晰,避免前后对比出现矛盾或混淆。
词汇资源
使用了climb, surpass, fluctuate等表达趋势的词汇,但词汇量整体有限且拼写错误如inllustrates。
积累并准确运用描述数据变化的丰富词汇,同时注意单位词如percentage point的恰当用法。
语法多样性与准确性
句式结构较为单一,存在非谓语动词孤立成句等碎片化句子问题以及时态与介词混用。
加强对主谓结构完整性的检查,规范使用过去时态,减少句子碎片和语法结构错误。
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The graph below shows the production of three forest industry products in a European country, namely timber, pulp and paper, from 1980 to 2000.
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