The graph below shows the change in production (Million Tonnes) of three products in the forest industry in a European country.

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Sample Response

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The graph illustrates how the production of three products in the forest industry in one European country changed over a 20-year period between 1980 and 2000.

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Overall, it is clear that the figures for pulp and paper followed an increasing trend, whereas timber experiencedexprienced a slight growth, equaling that for paper in approximately 1991in approximately in 1991.

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With regard to timber, its productionthe production of it increased significantly from about 6 million tonnes to 9 million tonnes6 tonnes to 9 tonnes over the first five years, after which it declined sharply to about 6.5 million tonnes over the next decadeto about 6.5 tonnes over the next decade. Then, it rose to 7.5 million tonnes in 2000rose to 7.5 tonnes in 2000. The production of pulp was also fluctuating, but more slightly. After increasing from 4 million tonnes in 1980 to 5 million tonnes in 1985from 4 tonnes in 1980 to 5 tonnes in 1985, it decreaseddecresed mildly to 4.5 million tonnes in 1990to 4.5 tonnes in 1990. Over the next decade, it rose to 6 million tonnesrose to 6 tonnes.

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By contrast, paperpaper's production increased significantly from 3 million tonnes in 1980 to 9 million tonnes in 1995from 3 tonnes in 1980 to 9 tonnes in 1995, surpassing thatthe for timber in 1991. Then, it kept rising, but more mildly. It only experiencedexprienced a small rise to 10 million tonnessmall rise to 10 tonnes in 2000.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.5

The response effectively organizes key trends and details across well-structured paragraphs with clear comparative language. However, the report consistently misstates the unit of measurement as individual tonnes rather than million tonnes and contains repeated spelling slips. To improve, ensure all data units are copied accurately from the chart axes and proofread carefully for minor mechanical errors.

Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TA

Task Achievement

6.0
Scoring rule

Key trends and major comparative features are identified, but the figures omit the essential 'million' unit specified on the vertical axis.

Next step

Always include the exact scale and units from the source chart to ensure data accuracy.

CC

Coherence and Cohesion

7.0
Scoring rule

Information is arranged logically into distinct paragraphs with clear overarching progression and appropriate linking phrases.

Next step

Vary sentence openings slightly more to avoid overusing introductory prepositional phrases.

LR

Lexical Resource

6.0
Scoring rule

A good variety of trend vocabulary is deployed, though spelling errors like 'exprienced' and 'decresed' recur.

Next step

Proofread systematically to eliminate basic typos and missing words in comparative phrases.

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0
Scoring rule

A good range of complex structure types is used with strong overall control of tense and sentence boundaries.

Next step

Refine preposition placement and phrase structures to avoid minor awkward phrasing in time expressions.