The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.
Sample Response
As we can see the map of town Garlsdon where a new supermarket is about to be established soon.
The total population of the town is 65,000, and we will be discussing the two outcomes possible for the site to be planned.
To begin with, the first plan is covering the countryside area where there is the least population which in result will lead to less crowd and ample of space for parking your vehicles. With that said, the population of the countryside is near about 10,000 and is 12 KM away from Hindon.
Secondly, the other plan is exactly the opposite of the first one, which is featuring in the middle of the town surrounding the industries. Moreover, the site is no traffic zone which will also make it eco-friendly and greener due to less pollution. To add further, the site is at 16KM away from Brandson with a population of 15,000 and 25 KM away from Cransdon with a population of 29,000, which makes it a prime location for more business.
To conclude, the second site plan suits me the most as it is in the prime location with more population covering which will profit the supermarket in terms of business.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use map terminology Original: plan Suggested revision: site Why it matters: The map presents possible sites rather than plans.
- 2. Correct location phrase Original: is covering Suggested revision: is located in Why it matters: A site is located in an area rather than covering it.
- 3. Use natural collocation Original: least population Suggested revision: sparsely populated surroundings Why it matters: This phrase describes low population density more naturally.
- 4. Correct linking phrase Original: which in result Suggested revision: which, as a result, Why it matters: The fixed linking expression is as a result.
- 5. Name the second site Original: other plan Suggested revision: second site Why it matters: Site is the accurate term for the mapped location.
- 6. Correct location verb Original: featuring Suggested revision: located Why it matters: The passive location phrase requires is located.
- 7. Correct surrounding areas Original: surrounding the industries Suggested revision: surrounded by housing and industry Why it matters: The map shows both housing and industrial areas around S2.
- 8. Remove unsupported inference Original: no traffic zone which will also make it eco-friendly and greener due to less pollution Suggested revision: in a traffic-free zone Why it matters: The map marks the town centre as traffic-free but gives no pollution outcome.
- 9. Use concise linker Original: To add further Suggested revision: Additionally Why it matters: Additionally is the standard additive connector here.
- 10. Correct distance phrase Original: at 16KM away Suggested revision: 16 km away Why it matters: The distance expression does not take at, and the unit should be lower-case.
- 11. Correct place name Original: Brandson Suggested revision: Bransdon Why it matters: The map labels this town Bransdon.
- 12. Correct distance phrase Original: KM Suggested revision: km Why it matters: Use the conventional lower-case unit for this distance.
Suggested Rewrites
- plan site
- is covering is located in
- least population sparsely populated surroundings
- which in result which, as a result,
- other plan second site
- featuring located
Why this response received Band 5.0
The response is easiest to follow when it treats the two proposed sites in separate paragraphs and identifies S1 as rural and S2 as central. Its task coverage is weakened by the absence of a factual overview and by unsupported claims about parking, pollution, and commercial suitability, while important access features are missed; prioritise an objective comparison of location, transport links, nearby land use, and population reach.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response identifies the basic locations of both sites but lacks a clear overview, omits important road and railway features, and adds several unsupported interpretations.
Replace the personal recommendation with an objective overview and compare S1 and S2 accurately by location, transport access, surrounding land use, and nearby populations.
Coherence and Cohesion
The separate treatment of the two sites creates a visible progression, although the introduction, isolated population paragraph, and subjective conclusion weaken the overall structure.
Use a compact introduction and overview before two balanced detail paragraphs, linking comparisons directly instead of relying on mechanical sequencing phrases.
Lexical Resource
There is some topic-related range, but frequent unnatural combinations such as 'ample of space' and 'more population covering' reduce precision.
Use accurate map-description vocabulary and natural collocations for accessibility, distance, population, land use, and location.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response attempts complex sentences, but frequent problems with articles, prepositions, clause construction, and agreement sometimes strain meaning.
Build shorter complete sentences first, then check articles and prepositions carefully when adding relative or comparison clauses.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.
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