The map is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.
Sample Response
The map is of the town of Garlsdon, where a new supermarket is planned. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.
Overall, the first location is in the northwestern area of the countryside. The other one is planned to be built in the town centre.
Looking at the information in more detail. A railway passes through the town; bothrailway passes through the town, both of the two possible sites are near the railway. Site 1 is next to an industrial area and the north-western countrysidethe housing, and it is more convenient for people who live nearbyhere. Site 2 is located in the town center. This area's transportation connects with other towns, such as Hindon, Bransdon and Cransdon. People can go to these towns via the main roads more easily than from Site 1more easily than site 1. However, the town centre is a no traffic zone. Furthermore, there are two mainthere several housing zones (to the north and south)housing areas around the town center. A large industrial areaTwo industrial areas are located in this area. The first one is in the northern area, and the other one is located to the southlocated the south of the town center.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The report effectively identifies the two proposed supermarket locations and highlights key transport connections across the map. However, it lacks specific numerical details such as distances and population figures, and contains inaccuracies regarding the surrounding land-use zones. Prioritize improving grammatical accuracy by eliminating sentence fragments and providing precise comparative details from the map.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The main locations and general transport links are outlined, but key visual details such as distances, population figures, and accurate details of the surrounding housing and industrial zones are omitted or misidentified.
Incorporate exact data from the legend and labels, including distances to neighboring towns and population sizes, to provide a complete description.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is arranged logically by location, but the flow is disrupted by a sentence fragment and a reliance on basic transition words.
Ensure all sentences are grammatically complete and use a wider variety of cohesive devices to link spatial comparisons smoothly.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary covers basic spatial locations and features sufficiently, but relies heavily on prompt phrasing and limited repetitive terminology.
Expand the range of location and comparative vocabulary, using varied expressions for positioning and accessibility.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures is attempted, but noticeable grammatical errors occur, including missing prepositions, verb errors, and a clear sentence fragment.
Proofread thoroughly to ensure complete sentence structures, correct subject-verb agreement, and accurate preposition use for locations.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The map is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.
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