The bar chart illustrates population trends globally by percentage from 1950 to 2040.
Sample Response
The yielded line bar charts demonstrate the percentage of urban and rural areas population trends and age-wise worldwide trends between 1950 and 2040.
Overall, it can be clearly seen that total and urban population rose will continue additionally, age group 15 to 65 people number was higher than others, and it will continue to jump up.
For area wise trends, in 1950, the total population was one in the tenth percentage, it increased dramatically, and after 70 years it was 40%. And it will take forecasting that in 2040, it touched its zenith point on account of 44%. Rural areas population proportion was only 4%, and it will remain unchanged till 2040. Moreover, a half one in the tenth percentile of the population in the Urban side, which grew later in 2020, is a quarter percentage, and after two decades, it rose 14%.
Forage trends, juveniles and golden-ager proportion were the same in 1950, and later throughout the period, both percentages were identical. After 2020 it will remain unchanged although the former touched its peak in 1960 whereas the latter one touched dip insane years. It is predicted that in 2040 the percentage will be 6%. Furthermore, age group 15 to 65 age groups had 7% which was same till 1960 but, later it goes upwards and will be 35% in 2040.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Correct forecast structure Original: And it will take forecasting that Suggested revision: It is forecast that Why it matters: This passive structure correctly introduces a future projection.
- 2. Use future tense Original: it touched Suggested revision: it will reach Why it matters: The 2040 value is a projection, so a future form is required.
- 3. State peak naturally Original: its zenith point on account of 44% Suggested revision: a peak of about 44% Why it matters: The revision expresses the projected maximum clearly and idiomatically.
- 4. Fix noun phrase Original: Rural areas population proportion Suggested revision: The rural population proportion Why it matters: The revised noun phrase correctly modifies population proportion.
- 5. Correct rural trend Original: will remain unchanged till 2040 Suggested revision: is projected to rise slightly to about 6% by 2040 Why it matters: The rural line rises modestly from roughly 4% to about 6% rather than staying unchanged.
- 6. State value clearly Original: a half one in the tenth percentile Suggested revision: about 6% Why it matters: The urban share in 1950 is shown at approximately 6%.
- 7. Use natural population term Original: in the Urban side Suggested revision: was urban Why it matters: Was urban is the natural way to describe the proportion living in urban areas.
- 8. Clarify urban change Original: which grew later in 2020, is a quarter percentage Suggested revision: and this figure grew to about 25% by 2020 Why it matters: The revision supplies a clear subject, verb and time relationship for the urban figure.
- 9. Correct projected increase Original: after two decades, it rose 14% Suggested revision: after two decades, it is projected to have risen by about 12 percentage points Why it matters: The urban share rises from about 25% in 2020 to roughly 37% in 2040, a change of about 12 points.
- 10. Introduce age trends Original: Forage trends Suggested revision: Regarding age trends Why it matters: The revision creates a clear and correctly formed transition to the second chart.
- 11. Use chart labels Original: juveniles and golden-ager proportion Suggested revision: the proportions of people under 15 and over 65 Why it matters: The chart's age-group labels are clearer and more accurate than these informal terms.
- 12. Correct starting comparison Original: were the same in 1950 Suggested revision: were different in 1950 Why it matters: The under-15 and over-65 shares begin at visibly different levels.
Suggested Rewrites
- And it will take forecasting that It is forecast that
- it touched it will reach
- its zenith point on account of 44% a peak of about 44%
- Rural areas population proportion The rural population proportion
- will remain unchanged till 2040 is projected to rise slightly to about 6% by 2040
- a half one in the tenth percentile about 6%
Why this response received Band 5.0
The response has a recognisable structure and its overview identifies the dominant rises in total, urban, and working-age populations. However, several descriptions are inaccurate or unclear, especially the claims that rural figures remain unchanged and that the two younger and older groups stay identical, while frequent awkward constructions obscure comparisons. Prioritise using simple, grammatical sentences anchored to exact years and values from each chart.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A relevant overview and some key figures are included, but several trends and comparisons are misstated or insufficiently clear.
Report exact start and end values and distinguish the fluctuating rural line from the separate under-15 and over-65 paths.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response follows an overview-and-details structure, but long, poorly controlled sentences weaken progression and referencing.
Group each chart's main trends into short comparison sentences with clear subjects and chronological sequencing.
Lexical Resource
There is some range in trend vocabulary, but frequent inappropriate choices and collocations make descriptions imprecise.
Prefer standard chart language such as rose to, remained broadly stable, peaked, and fell to.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Frequent errors in agreement, tense, articles, clause structure, and punctuation sometimes make meaning difficult to recover.
Build each comparison around one controlled subject-verb pattern before adding a time or value clause.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The bar chart illustrates population trends globally by percentage from 1950 to 2040.
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