The line graph shows the global demand of different textile from 1980-2015
Sample Response
The line chart illustrates total textile demand over the globe between 1980 and 2015.
Overall, the demand for polyester, cotton, and cellulosic textiles rose over the period shown, while the opposite was true for wool. Among them, polyester saw the most significant growth.
In 1980, the cotton demand was more than 10 million tons, making it the most popular fabric, and had increased steadily to nearly 30 million tons by 2000. After declining to about 20 million tons during this period, it continued to rise gradually, peaking at over 30 million tons in 2015. From 1980 to 1995, the demand for polyester also witnessed a steady increase, yet more significant than cotton, from around 5 to 20 million tons. After 1995, it rose dramatically and reached its peak at nearly 70 million tons in 2015.
In 1980, the demands for cellulosic and wool were almost the same, at around 5 million tons each. After that, they followed opposite patterns at a similar pace. From 1980 to 2000, while the figure for cellulosic dropped slightly then increased to about 10 million tons, that for wool increased then declined to almost no demand.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use concise phrasing Original: over the globe Suggested revision: worldwide Why it matters: Worldwide is the more natural adverb for describing global demand.
- 2. Clarify the reference Original: Among them Suggested revision: Of these fibres Why it matters: The revised phrase identifies the compared categories more explicitly.
- 3. Complete the comparison Original: yet more significant than cotton Suggested revision: at a faster rate than cotton Why it matters: The original comparative phrase lacks a clear grammatical link to the increase.
- 4. Use uncountable demand Original: the demands for cellulosic and wool Suggested revision: demand for cellulosic fibre and wool Why it matters: Demand is uncountable here, and cellulosic needs a noun to name the material.
- 5. Avoid overstating similarity Original: almost the same Suggested revision: relatively close Why it matters: The starting figures are roughly three and five million tons, so they are close rather than equal.
- 6. Remove false rate comparison Original: at a similar pace Suggested revision: overall Why it matters: The two series move in opposite directions but do not change at a similar rate.
- 7. Name the four series Original: total textile demand Suggested revision: demand for four textile fibres Why it matters: The chart tracks four separate fibre categories rather than a single total.
- 8. Use the chart label Original: textiles Suggested revision: fibre Why it matters: Cellulosic fibre matches the material category shown in the legend.
- 9. State the trend directly Original: the opposite was true for wool Suggested revision: demand for wool declined Why it matters: The replacement identifies the wool trend explicitly instead of relying on a vague contrast.
- 10. Emphasise the scale gap Original: saw the most significant growth Suggested revision: recorded by far the largest increase Why it matters: Polyester's rise is much larger than the increases in cotton and cellulosic fibre.
- 11. Use precise chart language Original: the most popular fabric Suggested revision: the most widely demanded fibre Why it matters: The visual reports demand for fibres, not popularity of finished fabrics.
- 12. Avoid inanimate witnessing Original: the demand for polyester also witnessed Suggested revision: demand for polyester also showed Why it matters: Demand can show an increase but cannot literally witness one.
Suggested Rewrites
- over the globe worldwide
- Among them Of these fibres
- yet more significant than cotton at a faster rate than cotton
- the demands for cellulosic and wool demand for cellulosic fibre and wool
- almost the same relatively close
- at a similar pace overall
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response is well organized and uses a varied range of vocabulary and sentence structures to describe the main patterns. Its main limitation is Task Achievement: several cotton figures are sequenced confusingly, and the account places the later rise in cellulosic demand around 2000 rather than across the years to 2015. Prioritize checking each series against the timeline and reporting the turning points in chronological order with accurate dates and values.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A clear overview identifies the dominant rise in polyester and the contrasting directions of the four fibres, but several dates and values for cotton, cellulosic and wool are inaccurate or incomplete.
Trace each line from 1980 to 2015 and report its principal turning points with the correct dates and approximate values.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response is logically paragraphed and groups related series effectively, although the cotton description becomes confusing because the decline is mentioned after a rise to 2000.
Present every series in strict chronological order so that each fall and recovery follows a clear sequence.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is varied and generally precise, with effective terms such as "peaking" and "followed opposite patterns", despite a few awkward collocations.
Use more natural data-reporting phrases such as "demand for cotton" and compare rates of growth directly rather than calling one rise "more significant".
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A good range of complex structures is mostly well controlled, and the occasional tense or comparative error does not impede meaning.
Keep time references and verb forms aligned, especially when moving from an initial value to a later increase or decline.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The line graph shows the global demand of different textile from 1980-2015
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