The graphs below provide information on global population figures and figures for urban populations in different world regions.
Sample Response
The provided illustrations show information on the world population from 1800 to 2100 and the distribution of this population in developed and developing regions. According toAs per the line graph, the global population increased comparatively slowly from 1800 to 1940 and reached over 2000 million in 1940. This was followed by a drastic rise to 6000 million by the year 2000. The graph shows the projection that this rapid growth of population is projected to continue until 2050will continue until 2050 when the population would be around 8,000 millionover 8000 million. However, after that, it would fall to about 6,700 million in 2100around 6000 million in 2100. According to the bar graph, around 1200 million people lived in developed countries in 2015 and this figure would remain unaffected until 2050. On the contrary, over 2000 million lived in developing countries in 2015 and the population in these areas are expected to be double by the year 2040. Overall, the global population is projected to risewould continue to rise until 2050 and the majority of the people would be living in developing regions while the population in the developed countries will remain almost the same.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response selects the central trends from both graphs and supports them with several relevant figures, while its varied sentence structures are mostly accurate. The main weakness is precision: it extends the regional chart to 2050 although it ends in 2040 and understates the projected 2100 total. Prioritise checking every year and value against the axes, then organise the report into clear paragraphs.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The report presents a clear overview and covers the principal population trends with generally relevant data from both visuals.
Correct the unsupported 2050 reference for the regional chart and report the 2100 global figure more accurately at roughly 6.5 to 7 billion.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information follows a coherent sequence from global growth to regional differences, but the entire report is presented as one paragraph.
Separate the introduction and overview from two detail paragraphs so the two graphs and their comparisons are easier to follow.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is varied and usually precise, with effective language for trends and projections, although a few expressions are unnatural.
Replace phrases such as 'as per' and 'remain unaffected' with more natural academic wording such as 'the graph shows' and 'remain stable'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses a good range of complex structures with mostly accurate control and only occasional non-impeding errors.
Check agreement and complement forms, especially changing 'the population ... are expected to be double' to 'the population is expected to double'.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The graphs below provide information on global population figures and figures for urban populations in different world regions.
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