The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.
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The pie charts illustrateThe chart illustrates how the proportion of water in six areas of the world differs for different purposes.differs in different purposes
Overall, it is clear that most of the watermost of water is used for agriculture in South America, Africa, Central Asia and South East Asia while North America and Europe tendtends to use water predominantly for industrial usemore in industry. Domestic use has nearly the lowest share across most areas.lowest shares of six areas.
With regard to well-developedwell developed regions such as North America and Europe, people use most of their water which accounts for 48% and 53% respectively for industrial purposesin industry use, followed by agricultureagricultural at 39% and 32% respectively. Domestic use accounts for 13% and 15% in those two areas, which represent the lowest proportions.which is the lowest.
Whenwhen it comes to the remaining four regions,those developing regions, the situation changessituation changed. In South America, Africa, Central Asia and South East Asia, agricultural use constitutes 71%, 84%, 88% and 81% respectively, compared with domestic use at 19%, 9%, 7% and 7%. Except in South East Asia, at 12%,Apart from South East Asia in 12%, industrial use is the lowest in the other three areas,in other three areas, making up 10%, 7% and 5%.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The report effectively covers all major key features with accurate numerical data and provides a clear overview comparing regional water consumption patterns. However, mechanical punctuation lapses and grammatical errors lower the structural control of the writing. Focusing on correcting subject-verb agreement and article usage while avoiding informal background assumptions will significantly improve the overall standard.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response presents a clear overview and accurately reports key statistics for all six regions without introducing factual errors.
Avoid making external assumptions, such as labeling regions as developed or developing, and focus purely on describing the visual data.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is logically grouped into distinct paragraphs comparing industrialised and agricultural patterns clearly.
Ensure capitalization is consistent at the start of sentences and refine transitional phrases between body paragraphs.
Lexical Resource
An adequate vocabulary range is used to describe percentages and sectors, though some awkward phrasing remains.
Replace repetitive word choices and awkward prepositions with more precise collocation structures.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A combination of simple and complex sentences is attempted, but frequent grammar and agreement errors are present.
Check for subject-verb agreement and proper article usage in noun phrases throughout the text.