The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries.
Sample Response
The chart illustrates the utilization of water all across the globe and the second chart depicts the consumption of water in two different countries.
Overall, it is immediately apparent from the chart the highest amount of water has been used for agriculture, while Brazil has the greatest depletion of the water as compared to the second nation.
To begin with, the maximum global water expenditure by the agriculture department began at approximately 500 Km in 1900, and this positive trend gradually sored over the years and reached 2000 km area covered with water after 17 years. Moreover, this amount hits its peak with shares at 3000 km in the final year. Therefore, the industrial and domestic categories consumed the least amount of water, beginning at an insignificant amount in 1900, and this ratio remained the same over the next 50 years, but a sharp inclined in the industrial sector has surged by more than 1000 km water used in 2000. whilst domestic sector had nominal changes at climbed by 200 km in the final year,
Furthermore, in Brazil, 359 m² of water is consumed per person, and 26,500 km² of water is used in land irrigation. Moreover, the total population of Brazil has 176 million, but the democratic public of Congo has only 5.2 million. It is interesting to note that water used by the irrigation sector is 100km, and an eight-meter cube of water is consumed by each year per person.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Identify the line graph Original: The chart illustrates Suggested revision: The line graph illustrates Why it matters: The first visual is specifically a line graph.
- 2. Identify the table Original: the second chart Suggested revision: the table Why it matters: The second visual is a table rather than another chart.
- 3. Keep past tense Original: this amount hits Suggested revision: this figure reached Why it matters: The description of a completed historical period requires past tense.
- 4. Use quantity wording Original: shares at Suggested revision: approximately Why it matters: Shares is not appropriate for an absolute volume of water.
- 5. Correct value unit Original: 3000 km Suggested revision: 3,000 km³ Why it matters: The graph measures water volume in cubic kilometres.
- 6. Start a clear sentence Original: whilst domestic sector Suggested revision: Meanwhile, domestic use Why it matters: This creates an independent sentence and a clear comparison.
- 7. Correct domestic figure Original: had nominal changes at climbed by 200 km Suggested revision: rose to about 500 km³ Why it matters: The graph shows domestic use reaching roughly 500 cubic kilometres in 2000.
- 8. End the sentence Original: the final year, Suggested revision: the final year. Why it matters: A full stop is needed at the end of this sentence.
- 9. Correct consumption unit Original: m² Suggested revision: m³ Why it matters: Per-person water consumption is measured in cubic metres.
- 10. Describe irrigated land Original: 26,500 km² of water is used in land irrigation Suggested revision: 26,500 km² of land is irrigated Why it matters: The table measures land area, not an area of water.
- 11. Use correct verb Original: has Suggested revision: is Why it matters: A population is a total, so is is the correct linking verb.
- 12. Correct country name Original: democratic public of Congo Suggested revision: Democratic Republic of Congo Why it matters: This is the country name shown in the table.
Suggested Rewrites
- The chart illustrates The line graph illustrates
- the second chart the table
- this amount hits this figure reached
- shares at approximately
- 3000 km 3,000 km³
- whilst domestic sector Meanwhile, domestic use
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response offers a clear broad comparison, correctly identifying agriculture as dominant and Brazil as much higher than Congo, and it attempts to cover both visuals. Accuracy and control are uneven: several dates, units, and values are misstated, while long sentences and unsuitable word choices obscure relationships; the priority is to select a few exact figures from each visual and report them in shorter, grammatically controlled comparisons.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A relevant overview and coverage of both visuals are provided, but errors in the time span, domestic-use figure, and measurement units reduce accuracy.
Check every year, value, and unit against the visuals, then support each overview trend with two or three precise comparisons.
Coherence and Cohesion
The introduction, overview, global-use paragraph, and country paragraph form a sensible sequence, but overextended sentences and some faulty connectors disrupt flow.
Divide the global trends into shorter comparison sentences and use connectors only where the logical relationship is clear.
Lexical Resource
The response shows a reasonable range, yet frequent miscollocations and inaccurate choices such as 'depletion,' 'agriculture department,' and 'sharp inclined' undermine precision.
Prefer standard data-description language such as consumption, agricultural use, rose gradually, and increased sharply, while preserving the chart's exact units.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex structures are attempted throughout, but frequent agreement, clause, word-form, and punctuation errors make several sentences difficult to process.
Control one comparison per sentence and proofread for complete clauses, subject-verb agreement, and correct noun and verb forms.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries.
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