The line graph shows the average rainfall for three countries in Great Britain over a 12 month period in 2018.
Sample Response
The line graph reveals the information of rainfall in three countries: England, Scotland, and Wales for one year starting from January to December in 2018.
In England, the amount of rainfall in January was recorded just above 100ml, which slightly increased in the next month by 5ml, and dipped to 90ml in March. The trend of raising and falling continue for a couple of months and reached its lowest figure in the graph for the month of June at around 70ml. After that, it is predicted that the level of rain will fluctuate and will remain around 120ml in December.
In Scotland, the amount of rain in January was 125ml, dropped unexpectedly to its lowest level to 20ml in February, and rocketed in next month to its peak value of 135ml. In April, the amounts of rain were less than 50ml, then start went up slightly until June. Then after it is predicted to drop until September, the following month it will start climbing up to October, and it will be decreased to 50 ml before reaching to 105 ml in December.
In wales, the rainfall was 50ml in January increased slightly in February and decreased to its lowest point in April around 30ml. In next month went up sharply to 110ml and dipped by 50ml in June. It is predicted that the highest amount of rain will be in July at 125ml and went down just below the month of June’s record. It will remain constant for two months before reaching 105ml in November and it will dip down in December to 52ml.
Overall it can be clearly seen that in each country the amount of rain in January will be approximately same in the month of December.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use natural phrasing Original: reveals the information of rainfall Suggested revision: presents rainfall data Why it matters: This replacement states clearly and naturally what the graph shows.
- 2. Correct adverb order Original: which slightly increased Suggested revision: which increased slightly Why it matters: The adverb normally follows the verb in this construction.
- 3. Fix form and tense Original: The trend of raising and falling continue Suggested revision: The pattern of rises and falls continued Why it matters: Use noun forms for the fluctuations and past tense for the 2018 data.
- 4. Use concise timing Original: for the month of June Suggested revision: in June Why it matters: The shorter time phrase is more natural in a graph description.
- 5. Use past tense Original: it is predicted that the level of rain will fluctuate Suggested revision: the rainfall fluctuated Why it matters: The graph reports historical data from 2018 rather than a forecast.
- 6. Correct December value Original: will remain around 120ml in December Suggested revision: reached about 130 ml in December Why it matters: The graph places England at roughly 130 ml in December, not around 120 ml.
- 7. Avoid unsupported judgment Original: unexpectedly Suggested revision: sharply Why it matters: The graph supports the size of the fall but not the judgment that it was unexpected.
- 8. Correct preposition Original: its lowest level to 20ml Suggested revision: its lowest level of 20 ml Why it matters: Use 'of' to state the value of a level.
- 9. Add definite article Original: in Suggested revision: the Why it matters: The time expression needs the definite article here.
- 10. Fix agreement Original: the amounts of rain were Suggested revision: the amount of rain was Why it matters: 'Amount' is singular when referring to one monthly rainfall figure.
- 11. Repair verb phrase Original: then start went up Suggested revision: then started to rise Why it matters: The original contains two incompatible verb forms.
- 12. Use clear past tense Original: Then after it is predicted to drop until September, Suggested revision: It then fell until September; Why it matters: This removes the faulty linker and describes the historical trend consistently.
Suggested Rewrites
- reveals the information of rainfall presents rainfall data
- which slightly increased which increased slightly
- The trend of raising and falling continue The pattern of rises and falls continued
- for the month of June in June
- it is predicted that the level of rain will fluctuate the rainfall fluctuated
- will remain around 120ml in December reached about 130 ml in December
Why this response received Band 6.0
The report’s strongest feature is its systematic coverage of all three countries, with many monthly values and fluctuations identified. Its overview is too narrow and somewhat misleading, while recurring tense and sentence-structure errors weaken precision; the highest-priority improvement is to summarise the dominant patterns and major contrasts accurately before presenting selected data in consistently grammatical past-tense sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response covers all three series and reports many broadly accurate monthly values, but the overview omits the main fluctuations and overstates the similarity between January and December.
Give a fuller overview highlighting the extreme volatility in Scotland and Wales and England’s comparatively narrower range before selecting key figures.
Coherence and Cohesion
Separate country paragraphs create clear progression, although some long sequences of monthly changes are mechanically linked and occasionally difficult to follow.
Group related rises and falls into shorter comparison-focused sentences instead of narrating nearly every month in sequence.
Lexical Resource
There is an adequate range of trend vocabulary, including terms such as fluctuate, rocketed, peak and dipped, but several collocations and word forms are inaccurate.
Use precise chart language such as rose, fell, remained stable and reached a low, while checking forms such as rising rather than raising.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of sentence forms is attempted, but frequent agreement, tense, article and clause-structure errors reduce control despite generally clear meaning.
Describe the completed 2018 data consistently in the past tense and proofread each sentence for a complete subject-verb structure.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The line graph shows the average rainfall for three countries in Great Britain over a 12 month period in 2018.
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