The graph shows the estimated oil production capacity for several Gulf countries between 1990 and 2010.
Sample Response
The provided bar chart enumerates the projected oil production capacity for six different nations over a two decades period of time. Besides, the units are calibrated in Millions of V barrels per day.
Overall, it is lucid that the majority of oil consumption was in Saudi Arabia, whilst the least production was from Qatar. However, the remaining nations, namely, Iran, Iraq, Kuwait, and UAE, have an akin range of oil productions over a period of time from 1990 to 2010.
Although the highest oil production capacity was from Saudi Arabia with 8 million barrels and reached the culmination of approximately 14 million barrels per day meanwhile, Iran’s oil production capacity was roughly three during the year 1990 and rose slightly to approximately 4 million barrels in the year 2010 even though the lowest oil production capacity was from Qatar with beneath 2 million barrels per day over two decades without any climb.
However, the remaining nations, Iraq, Kuwait, and UAE, have a similar production capacity for oil, commencing with 2 million barrels and rising dramatically to 4 million barrels for all three countries. As a matter of fact, these three nations were below 4 million during the period of time.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use chart verb Original: enumerates Suggested revision: illustrates Why it matters: ‘Illustrates’ is the natural verb for presenting information in a chart.
- 2. Match task wording Original: projected Suggested revision: estimated Why it matters: The chart identifies the figures as estimated production capacity.
- 3. Fix compound modifier Original: a two decades period of time Suggested revision: a two-decade period Why it matters: A singular hyphenated compound adjective is required before ‘period’.
- 4. Report correct measure Original: majority of oil consumption Suggested revision: highest oil production capacity Why it matters: The chart measures production capacity rather than oil consumption or a majority share.
- 5. Use precise comparison Original: least production Suggested revision: lowest production capacity Why it matters: ‘Lowest production capacity’ accurately names the quantity being compared.
- 6. Improve data phrasing Original: have an akin range of oil productions Suggested revision: had broadly similar oil production levels Why it matters: The revision uses the correct tense and a natural uncountable form of ‘production’.
- 7. Remove wordiness Original: over a period of time from 1990 to 2010 Suggested revision: between 1990 and 2010 Why it matters: The shorter phrase expresses the same time span precisely.
- 8. Use fitting transition Original: However, the remaining nations, Iraq Suggested revision: Meanwhile, the three other nations, Iraq Why it matters: ‘Meanwhile’ introduces parallel data, while ‘three other nations’ accurately signals the group size.
- 9. Use natural noun phrase Original: production capacity for oil Suggested revision: oil production capacity Why it matters: The revised compound noun is the conventional form.
- 10. Correct starting range Original: commencing with 2 million barrels Suggested revision: starting at roughly 1.5–2.5 million barrels Why it matters: The 1990 values differ across Iraq, Kuwait and the UAE rather than all starting at exactly two million.
- 11. Describe trend accurately Original: dramatically Suggested revision: steadily Why it matters: The four plotted years show progressive increases rather than a single dramatic jump.
- 12. Correct final values Original: 4 million barrels for all three countries Suggested revision: about 3.5–3.8 million barrels across the three countries Why it matters: The 2010 bars are similar but not identical and all remain below four million.
Suggested Rewrites
- enumerates illustrates
- projected estimated
- a two decades period of time a two-decade period
- majority of oil consumption highest oil production capacity
- least production lowest production capacity
- have an akin range of oil productions had broadly similar oil production levels
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response identifies Saudi Arabia and Qatar as the extremes and provides a usable broad overview, but several figures and trend descriptions are imprecise, while the coverage largely omits the intermediate years. Language is ambitious, yet awkward word choices and overloaded sentence structures regularly reduce clarity; prioritise accurate year-by-year comparisons in shorter, grammatically controlled sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A broad overview identifies the highest and lowest producers, but several values and trends are inaccurate or insufficiently detailed.
Compare the four years explicitly and report each country's main change with figures that match the chart.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response has a clear introduction, overview, and detail structure, although some linking produces overloaded or loosely connected sentences.
Divide the long third paragraph sentence into separate comparisons and use connectors only where the relationship is clear.
Lexical Resource
There is some range in vocabulary, but frequent inappropriate choices such as describing production as consumption reduce precision.
Use straightforward chart language such as produced, rose, remained stable, and barrels per day accurately and consistently.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of sentence forms is attempted, but recurring article, agreement, and clause-control errors sometimes strain readability.
Build shorter complex sentences with one main comparison each, checking articles, plurals, and complete clause boundaries.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The graph shows the estimated oil production capacity for several Gulf countries between 1990 and 2010.
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