The chart below shows the top ten countries with the highest spending on travel in 2014.
Sample Response
The bar chart outlines the top ten countries with the highest travel expenditurecountries which made the highest travel expenditure in 2014 and it also compares how much these countries spent on travel in the same year. The data were provided by the UNWTO.The data was collected from UNWTO. Overall, China stood at the top of the list with the highest spending while Taiwan ranked tenthproclaimed the tenth position. As the diagram suggests, China spent almost 110 billion US dollarsdollar on travel in 2014in 2014 for travel while the US and Germany each spent nearly 85 billion US dollarseach with its nearly 85 billion spending jointly ranked secondattained at the second position in this list. The UK spent roughly 55 billion, less than half China's figureless than half of China, for travel and the UK's spending for travel was more than doublemore than double than that of Singapore. South Korea and Hong Kong were tied in travel spendingThe travel spending by South Korea and Hong Kong was a tie and they each spentspend 20 billion USD in 2014. India spent about 15 billion US dollarsIndia's spending was just over 15 billion while Malaysia and Taiwan stood at the bottom two positions in the list with around spending of 10–12 billion US dollars10-12 billion spending in the same yearfor the same.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response accurately identifies the ranking pattern and reports nearly all values and comparisons clearly, with China highest and Taiwan lowest. Its main weakness is recurrent awkward phrasing and grammatical control, especially agreement, articles, prepositions, and comparative forms, while the one-paragraph structure makes the presentation feel dense. Prioritise precise collocations and error-free comparison sentences, then separate the overview from the detailed figures.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response provides a clear overview and accurately reports the main ranking, values, and comparisons across all ten countries.
Sharpen the overview by grouping the leading, middle, and lowest spenders rather than only naming the two extremes.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information progresses logically from the highest spenders to the lowest, with comparisons linked clearly despite the single-paragraph presentation.
Separate the introduction and overview from the detailed comparisons to make the organisation easier to follow.
Lexical Resource
A sufficient range of travel and comparison vocabulary is used, but several collocations such as proclaimed the tenth position and spending attained are unnatural.
Use conventional phrases such as ranked tenth, spent on travel, and jointly occupied second place.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response attempts varied complex sentences, but agreement, article, pronoun, preposition, and comparative errors recur throughout.
Proofread each comparison for subject-verb agreement and correct structures such as more than double rather than more than double than.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The chart below shows the top ten countries with the highest spending on travel in 2014.
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