The plans below show the home and plans for its redevelopment.
Sample Response
The yielded pictures show current home plans and after advancement.
Overall, it can be clearly seen that study/ bedroom number will increase, and all areas will use.
Presently, the entrance is on the southwest corner and next to its hall. The opposite side of the entrance is the study/bedroom and kitchen. North and Southside of the surrounded home is garden. The living room and study/bedroom are next to each other. Another study or bedroom is the entrance north side.
After development, the entrance remained the same. Study/bedroom number will be 5, on the east side, two and centre of the kitchen and the social area will develop. Moreover, the whole north part will study are. The Garden will same, but parking will develop in the south direction. The ensuite bathroom will also build, and one study or bedroom create next to the entrance. The rest of the space will be a hall.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use map terminology Original: yielded pictures Suggested revision: plans Why it matters: The visuals are plans, while yielded pictures is not an appropriate description.
- 2. Describe both plans Original: current home plans and after advancement Suggested revision: the current home and the proposed redevelopment Why it matters: This wording clearly identifies the existing layout and the proposed design.
- 3. Identify current plan Original: Presently Suggested revision: In the current plan Why it matters: This transition makes the time frame of the first layout explicit.
- 4. Correct corner preposition Original: on Suggested revision: in Why it matters: A feature is located in, rather than on, a corner.
- 5. Correct determiner Original: its Suggested revision: the Why it matters: The hall belongs to the layout rather than to the entrance.
- 6. Give exact direction Original: The opposite side of the entrance Suggested revision: To the east of the entrance Why it matters: The current plan places these rooms on the eastern side of the entrance.
- 7. Match plural subject Original: is the study/bedroom and kitchen Suggested revision: are a study/bedroom and the kitchen Why it matters: The compound subject requires a plural verb and appropriate articles.
- 8. Correct location phrase Original: is the entrance north side Suggested revision: is north of the entrance Why it matters: The location needs the prepositional phrase north of the entrance.
- 9. Use future tense Original: entrance remained Suggested revision: entrance will remain Why it matters: The redevelopment is proposed, so this feature should be described in the future tense.
- 10. Repair verb phrase Original: the whole north part will study are Suggested revision: the northern section will contain study/bedrooms Why it matters: The original clause lacks a grammatical verb phrase and misspells area.
- 11. Add a verb Original: The Garden will same Suggested revision: The garden will remain Why it matters: The clause needs a verb to express that this feature is retained.
- 12. Use passive construction Original: parking will develop in the south direction Suggested revision: parking will be added along the southern side Why it matters: The proposed parking is added by the redevelopment and is located south of the house.
Suggested Rewrites
- yielded pictures plans
- current home plans and after advancement the current home and the proposed redevelopment
- Presently In the current plan
- on in
- its the
- The opposite side of the entrance To the east of the entrance
Why this response received Band 4.5
The response has a useful present-versus-redevelopment structure and correctly notes the rise to five study/bedrooms, the new parking area, and the ensuite. However, several major changes are omitted or inaccurately described, including the removal of the living room, reduction of garden space, and reconfiguration of the kitchen and bathroom, while frequent grammatical errors obscure meaning. Prioritise an accurate overview and systematic room-by-room comparisons in complete sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response identifies some important additions but provides an imprecise overview and omits or misstates several substantial layout changes.
Summarise the conversion to denser study accommodation, then accurately compare the living room, garden, kitchen, bathrooms, parking, and bedrooms.
Coherence and Cohesion
Separate paragraphs for the current and proposed plans provide basic progression, though relationships between rooms are often presented unclearly.
Move methodically around each plan in the same direction and link each existing feature directly to its proposed change.
Lexical Resource
Some relevant map vocabulary is used, but restricted and inaccurate choices such as yielded pictures and after advancement frequently weaken precision.
Build a reliable set of redevelopment verbs and location phrases, including replace, relocate, convert, expand, adjacent to, and along the eastern side.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Frequent errors in articles, agreement, verb forms, and sentence construction regularly make descriptions difficult to follow.
Write complete subject-verb clauses and check every passive future form, for example will be built, will remain, and will be converted.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The plans below show the home and plans for its redevelopment.
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