The chart below shows information about changes in average house prices in five different cities between 1990 and 2002 compared with the average house prices in 1989.
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This bar chart illustrates the average house pricesaverage value of house from 1990 to 2002 in two different stages, compared within compearing with prices in 1989that in 1980, of five particular cities from different countries. The first part of the diagram indicates variation from 1990-1995. In these five years, average values of house in three cities (New York,Tokyo and London) showed an obvious decreaseshows a abviouse decrease of around 5% to 7.5%about account for around %5 to 7% than that in 1989. Meanwhile the other two cities’other two citiys’ house values presented an increasepresent a increase than that in 1989. And can be seen from the second part which shows the last five years’years’s variation, onlyvariation.only one city (Tokyo) still presents a 5% decrease than that in 1989. Moreover, London’s average house value has a sharp rise by over 10%to the 10 percentage change from 1989 prices. There are only only Tokyo saw a decrease in 1996-2002two cities’ mean house prices show decrease in 1996-2002 than those in 1990-2002 compared withby compearing with that in 1989. Overall ,it clearly shows an increase in house pricesexpense in house wealthy from 1990 -2002 in most cities. And it also shows that in the two different periodsin different stage of the decade (from 1990-2002) average house prices showed different trendsprices presents different variation than that in 1989.
Why this response received Band 5.0
文章尝试对图表的主要趋势和具体数据进行描述,并做出了基本的对比。然而,数据表达中存在多处不准确之处,且频繁出现的拼写、语法和句式结构错误对整体阅读流畅度造成了明显影响。建议重点提升对图表数据的精确解读能力,并加强基础语法与拼写规范。
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
任务完成度
文章覆盖了两个时间段的主要变化,但对部分城市的具体数据(如第二个阶段的数据对比)描述存在错误和模糊之处。
仔细核对图表中各城市在不同时间段的具体百分比数据,确保趋势描述和数值对比完全准确。
连贯与衔接
文章具备基本的段落框架,但段落内部和句子之间的衔接不够自然,部分过渡句表达较为生硬。
增加恰当的连接词和指代词,使数据对比和时间段转换的逻辑更加连贯顺畅。
词汇资源
使用的词汇量有限,且出现了多次拼写错误(如 compearing、abviouse、citiys)及用词不当。
积累图表描述所需的常用替换词汇(如 percentage change, drop, surge),并注意基础词汇的拼写准确性。
语法多样性与准确性
存在较多语法错误和不完整的句式结构,如缺少主语或谓语搭配不当,影响了句子的表达效果。
练习使用正确的图表描述句型(如 There was a decrease of... 或 Prices experienced an increase of...),减少语法失误。