The line graph below shows the household recycling rates in three different countries between 2005 and 2015.
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Sample Response
The given line graph compares the proportion of household recyclingdomestic waste recycling in the UK, France and Germany from 2005 to 2015. Overall, the recycling rates in the UK and Germany increased over the period whereas the rate in France decreased overallwhile it actually decreased in France. According to the given illustration, the household recycling rate in France was 50% in 2005 which was about 14 percentage pointsapproximately 13% and 30 percentage points higher30% higher than that of the UK and Germany respectively. After four years, recycling ratesquotient in these three countries were close to 40% for the UK and France, while Germany was just above 30%stood at around 40% and the rates increasedthe pace actually increases during this period in both Germany and the UKboth in Germany and the UK while it dropped in France. The recycling rate in France kept on falling and in 2013 it recycled around 30% household wastegarbage. In the meantime, the recycling rate in Germany and the UK continually improved and both countries recycled over 50% wastewastages in 2013. In the final year, the household recycling rate in France rose abovewent high than that of 2013 and stood at 40%. In this year household recycling rate in the UK was the highestratio in the UK was highest, over 60% and in Germany, it was around 58%.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response’s clearest strength is its accurate overview and generally effective selection of the main recycling trends and end-point figures. Its main weakness is imprecise language and an incomplete comparison around 2009, especially Germany’s position relative to the other countries. The highest-priority improvement is to describe that crossover explicitly while using natural graph vocabulary and consistently accurate comparative structures.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response gives a clear overview: the UK and Germany rose while France fell overall. It reports most major figures accurately, including France at 50% in 2005, the UK above 60% in 2015 and Germany near 58%, though the 2009 comparison is slightly imprecise.
Add the crossover around 2009 and distinguish Germany’s lower 2009 rate from the UK and France.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is logically sequenced from the starting point to the final year. Several long sentences include too many comparisons, but progression remains clear.
Split the middle-years explanation into one sentence for France and one for the UK and Germany.
Lexical Resource
The range is suitable for line-graph reporting, but expressions such as recycling quotient, wastages and went high are unnatural.
Use recycling rate, household waste, rose to, fell to and reached consistently.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Grammar is mostly clear, with errors in articles, subject-verb agreement and comparative forms. These errors rarely obscure the data.
Check comparative structures such as higher than and maintain past-tense reporting.