The charts below shows the proportion of income spent on food and other goods across 3 European nations from 1998 to 2008.

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The two bar charts compare the proportions of income spent on food and other goods in France, Germany, and EnglandFrance, Germany and England in 1998 and 2008.

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Overall, the proportion of expenditure on both categoriesspending on both categories increased as a share of income in all three countries. France experienced the largest steepest growthoverall increases, while Germany saw relatively modest changes. England also recorded a particularly sharp rise in spending on other goods.

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In 1998, the highest proportion of income was allocated to food in GermanyGermany allocated the highest proportion of income to food, at 25%, compared with 15% in France and 10% in England. By 2008, however, France had overtaken Germany, with its figure rising sharply to 40%. Meanwhile, the proportions in Germany and England increased by just five percentage points each, reaching 30% and 15%, respectively.

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A similar upward pattern emerged inA similar upward trend can be observed in spending on other goods. France experienced the largest increase, from roughly 10%approximately 9% to 40%. England also saw substantial growth, with the figure climbing from 8% to 35%. In contrast, Germany recorded a smaller rise, from around 17% to 24%.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 8.0

文章准确且全面地总结了图表中的关键数据与变化趋势,段落划分合理,对比清晰自然。整体语言表达地道流畅,语法与词汇运用展现出了极高的控制力。若想进一步提升,可在总结段中对不同消费类别的整体高低差异进行更深刻的归纳。

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IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TA

任务完成度

8.0
Scoring rule

文章包含清晰的概述,准确提取了三个国家在两个年份及两类商品上的关键数据与比较。

Next step

可以在概述中补充对比食物与其它商品之间的整体消费偏好差异,使总体趋势更加立体。

CC

连贯与衔接

8.0
Scoring rule

逻辑结构非常清晰,按消费类别分段合理,衔接词使用自然流畅。

Next step

继续保持现有的分段逻辑,可尝试使用更多多样化的句间过渡手段来增加衔接自然度。

LR

词汇资源

8.0
Scoring rule

词汇丰富且使用精准,成功运用了表示上升、超越和比例分配的多种地道表达。

Next step

可以进一步积累并使用更具学术感的表达方式,如“expenditure pattern”或“allocation of household budget”。

GRA

语法多样性与准确性

8.0
Scoring rule

句式结构多样,熟练运用了分词短语、比较结构与复合句,且全篇无明显语法错误。

Next step

保持现有句式准确度,在写作中可继续巩固复杂从句与倒装句等高阶句型的自然应用。