The table below gives information on internet use in six categories by age group.
Sample Response
The given data shows the internet activitiesinternet usages activity of seven age groups. As is presented in the data, teenagers mainly play games, get news and download contentteenagers mostly play games and get news while the middlemid-aged people mostly do product research and buy productssearch and purchase products. According to the presentation, teenagers mostly play online games, look for news, download, and buy products onlinepurchase products when they are online. Only 5% search for peopleThey rarely search for people. As age increases, product research becomes the dominant activityWith the increase of age internet users do product search mostly and their next most common activities aretheir second most activity online involves getting news and buying products. Among internet users in their 40s to 60sAmong the 40 to 60 years old internet users, the most common activity is product researchpurchasing. As users get olderWith the increase of age, the download activity decreases and searching for people activity increases. For instance, only 5% of teenagers’ activityonly 5% activity of teenagers involves searching for people while this rate increases to around 30% when they get older. On the other hand, 52% of teenagers’ internet activities involve downloading from the internet while this rate decreases to less than 30% over time. Similarly, the online game playing is most popular among teenagers and this percentage decreases significantly among the oldergrownup people. In summary, teenagers mostly download and play games online while matured people mostly search and purchase products online. Getting news and buying products are done by all age groupsgroup and aged people mostly search for other people online.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response captures several broad age-related trends, particularly the decline in gaming and downloading and the greater emphasis on product research among adults. However, some table details are misstated or overlooked, and the dense single paragraph contains repetitive and awkward language, so the priority is to organise the data by age pattern and support the clearest contrasts with accurate category names and figures.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response identifies several useful trends, including high teenage gaming/downloading and higher product research among adults. However, it misses or misstates some table details, such as product research being zero for teens and news being high across all groups.
Use exact category names and select the clearest cross-age contrasts: games/downloads fall with age, product research jumps after the teens, and news remains consistently high.
Coherence and Cohesion
The answer progresses from overview to details, but it is one dense paragraph with repeated “with the increase of age” phrasing.
Separate the overview from two detail paragraphs: younger users and older users.
Lexical Resource
Lexical range is sufficient, but there are awkward phrases such as “internet usages activity” and “matured people”.
Use “internet activities”, “older age groups”, “product research”, and “buying products online”.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Grammar errors with noun forms, articles and plural agreement are frequent but generally do not obscure meaning.
Revise plural categories and use “as age increases” or “among older users” for comparisons.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The table below gives information on internet use in six categories by age group.
Your response
Write the task yourself, then compare your choices with the annotated response.