The charts below show the Marvel character’s’ movie right and the top five frannchise in 2014 and 2017 You should write a least 150 words.
Sample Response
The graphics illustrate how the movie rights of Marvel superhero characters changed from 2014 to 2017, associated with the revenue made from the top 5 franchises.
Over this 4-year period, Spider-Man was constantly the best-selling character, which was followed by X-Men Avengers exceeded Iron Man in 2017 to take the third place Fantastic Four fell out of the top five, and its place was taken by Captain American.
Ever since Marvel studio’s efforts in getting back the rights of its characters that were sold to different movie companies in the 1990s, a large number of superheroes had been taken back by 2014. However, the most-profitable character, Spider-Man, was still solely owned by Sony Pictures along with its main foe, Venom Likewise, the ownership of the other two top-five franchises, namely X-men and Fantastic Four, has not been bought back from 20th Century Fox, which possessed the second most characters in 2014. It shared Quicksilver and Red Scarlet with Marvel, though. Namor was another co-owned character between Marvel and Universal Pictures, while Lionsgate Entertainment had the full right of Man-thing.
By 2017, Marvel had successfully regained the rights of all top-five franchises along with much more main characters. They included all those once belonging to 20th Century Fox and Spider-Man, whose right was shared with Sony Pictures Even so, Venom, as well as some 14 other characters, still belonged to Sony Pictures only. Universal Pictures was another company that co-owned some characters, such as Huth and Namor, with Marvel but had the entire ownership of She-Hulk.
Overall, thanks to Stan Lee’s endeavor, Marvel Studio had got bath the movie rights of the majority of its characters, including all the top-five franchises.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Correct the company name Original: Marvel studio’s efforts Suggested revision: Marvel Studios' efforts Why it matters: The company name is plural, and the possessive apostrophe follows the final s.
- 2. Use concise phrasing Original: in getting back Suggested revision: to regain Why it matters: 'To regain' expresses the purpose more precisely and formally.
- 3. Name what was regained Original: a large number of superheroes had been taken back Suggested revision: the rights to many superheroes had been regained Why it matters: The companies regained rights, not the superhero characters themselves.
- 4. Match the revenue measure Original: most-profitable character Suggested revision: highest-grossing character Why it matters: The accompanying bars report gross revenue rather than profit.
- 5. Separate the sentences Original: Venom Likewise, Suggested revision: Venom. Likewise, Why it matters: A full stop is needed between these two independent thoughts.
- 6. Correct capitalisation Original: men Suggested revision: Men Why it matters: Both elements of the franchise name are capitalised.
- 7. Keep past tense consistent Original: has not been bought back Suggested revision: had not been regained Why it matters: The surrounding account refers to the ownership situation in 2014.
- 8. Use comparative noun phrase Original: second most characters Suggested revision: second-largest number of characters Why it matters: A countable noun needs 'number', and the compound adjective is hyphenated.
- 9. Correct the character name Original: Red Scarlet Suggested revision: Scarlet Witch Why it matters: The 2014 graphic labels the shared character as Scarlet Witch.
- 10. Fix ownership construction Original: co-owned character between Suggested revision: character co-owned by Why it matters: The passive ownership construction takes 'by', not 'between'.
- 11. Use plural rights Original: right Suggested revision: rights Why it matters: Movie rights is conventionally plural in this context.
- 12. Correct proper-name case Original: thing Suggested revision: Thing Why it matters: Both parts of the character's name are capitalised.
Suggested Rewrites
- Marvel studio’s efforts Marvel Studios' efforts
- in getting back to regain
- a large number of superheroes had been taken back the rights to many superheroes had been regained
- most-profitable character highest-grossing character
- Venom Likewise, Venom. Likewise,
- men Men
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response is ambitious and generally well organised, comparing ownership in 2014 and 2017 with a useful account of the leading franchises. Its main weakness is that franchise performance receives little numerical support and a few causal or ownership claims are broader than the visuals establish. The priority is to ground the overview and comparisons in precise chart evidence while correcting the run-on sentences that interrupt readability.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response identifies the principal changes in movie rights and the broad franchise ranking, but it underuses the gross figures and includes some unsupported causal framing.
Support the franchise comparison with selected values from both charts and omit claims about Stan Lee's role that the visuals do not demonstrate.
Coherence and Cohesion
The paragraph sequence from overview to 2014 and 2017 creates clear progression, though several missing sentence boundaries disrupt the flow.
Divide the compressed overview statements into complete sentences and keep each comparison explicitly tied to one year or chart.
Lexical Resource
There is a good range of ownership and ranking vocabulary, but errors such as 'much more main characters', 'Captain American', and 'got bath' reduce precision.
Proofread names and use accurate countable forms and collocations, such as 'many more major characters' and 'regained the rights'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses varied complex structures with generally clear meaning, but run-on sentences, tense shifts, and omitted punctuation recur noticeably.
Prioritise complete sentence boundaries, especially before 'Avengers', 'Likewise', and 'Even so', then check tense consistency across the two years.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The charts below show the Marvel character’s’ movie right and the top five frannchise in 2014 and 2017 You should write a least 150 words.
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