The plans below show the layout of an office in 2020 and now, after renovation.
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The two diagramspiagrams compare the different layoutslayout of an office in 2020 and its present interior designpresent internal looking after renovation.
Overall, the private desk area is replaced by an open working area and a new water cooler. Desks and chairs are groupedgotten together for the face-to-face communal area. In addition, a new social space and devices have been added in the southwestern.
Looking atCompared with these two floor plans, it is clear that on the left side of this office, the new filing cabinet is designed to be the bigger L-shaped cabinet and removed to the northwestnorthwestern of this room. The original area is replaced by a social area with a sofa, an armchair, a coffee table, and a coffee machine in the southwest.the social area with a sofa, an armchair and a coffee table. A coffee machine is set in the southwestern.
Apart from that, on the right side of this office, the private desk area has been replaced byis changed to a new water cooler. Meanwhile, there is still one desk in the southeast cornersoutheastern by the entrance Deleteis retained with no changes. By contrast, other desks have been moved toare removed to the northnorthern of this office and reconfigured into a shared communal workspacechanged to be a whole sharing working area.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response effectively covers the major changes between the two office plans and includes a clear overview. However, inaccurate directional phrasing and recurring grammatical mistakes detract from the clarity of the report. To enhance the overall quality, focus on using precise directional prepositions and refining passive structures when reporting spatial transformations.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The summary identifies the main structural changes across both time periods, including the shift toward a communal workspace and added amenities.
Ensure spatial locations and positional details match the diagram accurately by using standard compass references like north-west or south-west as adjectives or nouns with correct prepositions.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is arranged logically into clear paragraphs with recognizable transition signals.
Vary cohesive phrases to sound more natural rather than relying on mechanical connectors like apart from that and by contrast.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary conveys the essential key features of the diagram, though spelling and word choice errors occur.
Practice using precise lexical items for map descriptions, such as relocated, modified, or reconfigured, instead of informal or inaccurate phrases.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A range of complex structures is attempted, but frequent control errors in prepositions, passive forms, and clause construction are present.
Review passive verb constructions and prepositional phrases used for describing location changes to increase grammatical accuracy.