The graph below shows the population change between 1940 and 2000 in three different counties in the US state of Oregon.

Sample Response

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The line graph shows how the population in three countiescountries in the state of Oregon in the USA changed between 1940 and 2000. Overall, Washington had far higher population than Columbia and Yamhill and the population growth between 1980 and 2000 was considerably higher. In 1940, the population of Columbia was about 25 thousandaround 28 thousand, the smallest ofthe lowest among the three counties in Oregonin the Oregon state. Yamhill had a population of 30 thousand, while30 thousand while Washington had 75 thousand, the highest figure75 thousand inhabitants, the highest among these counties. By 1970, Yamhill’s population had increased by 50%population increased by 50% while Columbia experiencedwitnessed about a 40% population increase40% population increase over the previous three decadesduring the last three decades. At that time, Washington’s population reached to nearly 125 thousand which was somewhat double than the population of Yamhill and Columbia together in this year. Finally, in 2000, Columbia and Yamhill accommodated roughly 90 and 80 thousand citizens, a noticeable growth than that of the last three decades. In 2000, Washington'sIn this year, Washington’s population reached approximatelyreached to approximately 250 thousand, more than doublemore than double than its 1970 figurethat of 1970’s.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.0

The response is chronologically organised and correctly identifies Washington as the largest and fastest-growing county, with several early values reported accurately. Its main limitation is numerical precision: the 1970 combined comparison is overstated, the 2000 Columbia and Yamhill figures are reversed, and the overview refers to 1980 rather than 1970. Prioritise matching each line to its county and calculating comparisons directly from the plotted values.

Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TA

Task Achievement

6.0
Scoring rule

The overall population pattern is clear and early data are mostly accurate, but several later values, dates, and relative comparisons are incorrect.

Next step

Check the legend and year labels before assigning values, and calculate ratios only after recording the three county figures accurately.

CC

Coherence and Cohesion

6.0
Scoring rule

Information progresses logically through 1940, 1970, and 2000, although the one-paragraph format and inaccurate comparisons weaken clarity.

Next step

Separate the overview and organise the detail around the first two years before comparing all three counties in 2000.

LR

Lexical Resource

5.5
Scoring rule

The vocabulary is sufficient for population trends, but inaccurate or awkward choices such as ‘countries’, ‘accommodated’, and ‘growth than’ reduce precision.

Next step

Use ‘counties’, ‘population stood at’, ‘rose to’, ‘increased by’, and ‘higher than’ consistently.

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

5.5
Scoring rule

Meaning remains generally clear, but errors with prepositions, articles, comparatives, possessives, and clause punctuation occur frequently.

Next step

Revise structures such as ‘reached 125,000’, ‘twice as high as’, and ‘the 1970 figure’.

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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1

The graph below shows the population change between 1940 and 2000 in three different counties in the US state of Oregon.

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