The line graph below shows the number of annual visits to Australia by overseas residents. The table below gives information on the country of origin where the visitors came from.
Sample Response
The line graph given depicts information about a yearly tour to Australia in 30years interval (1975 -2005) by residents of other countries while the table shows the data on the originality of the visitors. Overall, it can be seen that visits to Australia saw an upward trend in the number of visitors yearly likewise the table. Residents from Japan had the highest number of visitors in 1975 and 2005, whereas China had the least no of visits to Australia.
First, the number of visitors to Australia in 1975 stood at about 8million. Over the next 10 years, the number of visitors doubled. The visit to Australia saw an upward trend between 1985 to 1995. The number of people who travelled to Australia skyrocketed to almost a 25million in 1995. There was a steady rise in the number of people that travelled to Australia over the next decade where it hit a peak at just over 30 million visitors in 2005.
On the other hand, the table shows the six countries that visited Australia between 1975 and 2005. Japan had the highest number of visits to Australia between 1975 and 2005 at 3.2 million and 12 million respectively, followed by South Korea with the value of 2.9 million in 1975 and 9.1 million visitors in 2005. Europe, Britain, and the USA had a similar trend in ascending other in 1975 and 2005. However, China had the least number of visits to Australia. A total of 0.3 million Chinese took a tour to Australia in 1975, while 0.8 million Chinese residents visited Australia in 2005.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use chart wording Original: a yearly tour to Australia Suggested revision: annual visits to Australia Why it matters: The graph counts visits rather than describing a single yearly tour.
- 2. Correct time phrase Original: in 30years interval Suggested revision: over a 30-year period Why it matters: A singular interval requires an article and a compound adjective.
- 3. Express date range Original: (1975 -2005) Suggested revision: from 1975 to 2005 Why it matters: The prose needs a grammatical from-to range rather than a parenthetical fragment.
- 4. Correct origin term Original: originality of the visitors Suggested revision: countries of origin of the visitors Why it matters: Originality does not mean the countries from which visitors came.
- 5. Identify visitor group Original: Residents Suggested revision: Visitors Why it matters: The table records visitors by origin, not all residents of Japan.
- 6. Use concise comparison Original: highest number of visitors Suggested revision: largest visitor total Why it matters: Largest visitor total expresses the quantitative comparison more naturally.
- 7. Use correct superlative Original: least no of visits Suggested revision: fewest visitors Why it matters: Fewest is the correct countable superlative and avoids the informal abbreviation.
- 8. Correct starting total Original: about 8million Suggested revision: about 8.8 million Why it matters: The table gives the 1975 total as 8.8 million.
- 9. Correct 1985 change Original: the number of visitors doubled Suggested revision: the total rose to about 15.5 million Why it matters: The graph shows roughly 15.5 million in 1985, which is less than double 8.8 million.
- 10. Use plural trend subject Original: The visit to Australia Suggested revision: Visitor numbers Why it matters: A trend across many annual visits requires a plural quantitative subject.
- 11. Correct range structure Original: between Suggested revision: from Why it matters: From pairs with to when stating a time range.
- 12. Use neutral trend verb Original: skyrocketed Suggested revision: rose Why it matters: Rose describes the increase accurately without an exaggerated tone.
Suggested Rewrites
- a yearly tour to Australia annual visits to Australia
- in 30years interval over a 30-year period
- (1975 -2005) from 1975 to 2005
- originality of the visitors countries of origin of the visitors
- Residents Visitors
- highest number of visitors largest visitor total
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response is clearly organised and identifies the overall rise in visits as well as Japan and China as the largest and smallest sources. Its main limitation is uneven precision: the claim that visits doubled by 1985 is inaccurate, and several countries receive only vague treatment. The priority is to verify each plotted value and add concise, accurate comparisons across the middle-ranking origins.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The main trend, endpoint figures, and highest and lowest source countries are covered, but one line-graph comparison is inaccurate and several table categories are underdeveloped.
Correct the 1975-to-1985 change and compare Europe, Britain, and the USA with specific values rather than a vague shared-trend statement.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is arranged sensibly into an overview, line-graph details, and table details, with generally clear progression.
Reduce repetitive references to visits to Australia and use accurate linking that shows addition rather than contrast between the two visuals.
Lexical Resource
There is enough range to describe trends and rankings, but collocational errors and overstatement reduce precision.
Replace expressions such as yearly tour, originality of the visitors, and skyrocketed with accurate academic graph vocabulary.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses both simple and complex structures, although article, preposition, noun-form, and spacing errors occur regularly.
Edit numerical sentences for articles, spacing, and time prepositions, using forms such as 8.8 million and from 1985 to 1995.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The line graph below shows the number of annual visits to Australia by overseas residents. The table below gives information on the country of origin where the visitors came from.
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