The maps below show Pancha Village in 2005 and 2015.
Sample Response
The yielded map demonstrates the changes in punch village from 2005 to 2015.
Overall, it can be clearly seen that the village became more advanced and improved in infrastructure after an advancement. In 2005, soil and rocks surface road passed through the centre of the village, and it also divided the village into two parts. In the northeast corner was a primary school, whereas the pagoda was on the southeast side; however, the opposite side of it was the market. Both sides of the road had several accommodations.
After a decade, all places locations remained the same, primary school and market were the same as was in 2005 although, it was reconstructed and was modern. The biggest change made in the road was cement concrete and had traffic instructor such as driving the speed limit, road indication tag moreover, on the left side of road electricity tower pass. Accommodation and pagoda were same although the number of the house in pagoda rose. New network tower builds or develops in the southwest corner.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use correct chart noun Original: yielded map Suggested revision: maps Why it matters: The task presents two maps, and 'yielded' does not describe a visual.
- 2. Correct the place name Original: punch village Suggested revision: Pancha Village Why it matters: The village name must match the task prompt exactly.
- 3. Describe the road clearly Original: soil and rocks surface road Suggested revision: a dirt-and-stone road Why it matters: This wording accurately and naturally describes the unpaved road shown in 2005.
- 4. Add the location article Original: a Suggested revision: the Why it matters: The definite article is needed for the specific school shown on the map.
- 5. Use precise map language Original: on the southeast side Suggested revision: in the southeast Why it matters: This is the conventional phrasing for a location within a mapped area.
- 6. Clarify the reference Original: the opposite side of it Suggested revision: the opposite side of the road Why it matters: Naming the road removes the unclear pronoun reference.
- 7. Name the buildings accurately Original: accommodations Suggested revision: houses Why it matters: The map shows individual houses rather than accommodation facilities.
- 8. Use the mapped year Original: After a decade Suggested revision: By 2015 Why it matters: The exact year creates a clearer transition to the second map.
- 9. Remove redundant wording Original: all places locations Suggested revision: all locations Why it matters: 'Places' and 'locations' duplicate the same meaning.
- 10. Fix comparison grammar Original: were the same as was in 2005 Suggested revision: remained in the same locations as in 2005 Why it matters: The original comparison has faulty agreement and structure.
- 11. Fix pronoun and clause Original: although, it was reconstructed and was modern Suggested revision: although both were expanded and modernised Why it matters: A plural pronoun is required because the clause refers to both the school and the market.
- 12. Name the new structure Original: New network tower Suggested revision: A new communications tower Why it matters: This is a more precise name for the tower shown in the southwest.
Suggested Rewrites
- yielded map maps
- punch village Pancha Village
- soil and rocks surface road a dirt-and-stone road
- a the
- on the southeast side in the southeast
- the opposite side of it the opposite side of the road
Why this response received Band 5.0
The response identifies the broad modernization of the village and mentions several visible upgrades, including the surfaced road, utilities, and a communications tower. Its main limitation is incomplete and sometimes unclear coverage of the mapped changes, compounded by frequent language errors; the highest priority is to select the major changes accurately and express each comparison in a controlled sentence.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A general overview and several changes are included, but the school expansion and market development are overlooked while housing changes are described imprecisely.
State the main transformations in the overview, then compare the road, school, market, utilities, and housing accurately across the two maps.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response follows a broadly chronological structure, but overloaded sentences and poorly controlled linking weaken progression within the final paragraph.
Group related changes by location or feature and use one clear comparison per sentence with simpler linking.
Lexical Resource
There is some relevant vocabulary for maps and infrastructure, but frequent inaccurate choices such as accommodations, traffic instructor, and road indication tag reduce precision.
Use standard map-description terms such as houses, traffic signs, electricity poles, and paved road, checking collocations carefully.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response attempts varied structures, but frequent errors in agreement, articles, verb forms, and sentence boundaries regularly strain clarity.
Build accurate simple and compound comparison sentences before adding subordinate clauses, and check every verb for tense and agreement.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The maps below show Pancha Village in 2005 and 2015.
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