The graph below shows the annual amount (kg) of meat eaten per person per year in five different countries from 1961 to 2013.
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The given line graph illustratesThis given graph villustrares the information about the annual amount (kg) of meat eaten per person per year in five different nations between 1961 and 2013.
Overall, it is clear that the annualannula amount of meat eaten per person in China and Brazil followed ana upward trend. By contrast, the figure for Canada and Kenya witnessed an overall declineCanada and Kenya experienced a rise.The figure for the UKThe annual number of UK shows a wave increased over this periodin these period.
The annual amount of meat consumed per personThe annual number of meat eaten by per people per year in China rose from nearly 5kg to nearly 8kg in 1981, before increasing to 40kg in 2013.The figure for Brazil climbed slightly from nearly 5kg to around 15kgalmost 20kg throughout the period.
Looking at the annual amount of meat in Canada, after mounting from nearlynealy 55kg to 70kg,the figure dropped significantly to 50kg from 1961 to 2013. The figure for Kenya steadilysmoothly decreased to around 5kg in 2013nearly 8kg from 1961 to 2013,and it was the lowest in those five nations.
Meat consumption per person in the UKThe number of meat eaten per person per year in UK saw a dramaticdranatic rise, but the figure increased to over 50kg, making it the highest figure among all five countries in 2013.it became the most in those five countries in 2013.
Why this response received Band 5.0
文章能够对图表的主要数据做出基本描述，并划分了清晰的段落结构。然而，概述与细节描述中存在多处数据误读和趋势判断错误，同时词汇与语法错误频繁出现。建议加强图表数据的精准核对，并重点提升不可数名词修饰、基本时态与拼写的准确性。
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任务完成度
文章包含总结段落和数据细节，但概述中对肯尼亚和加拿大的趋势总结有误，且部分具体数据不够准确。
写总述前应仔细核对各条折线的整体走向，确保趋势概括与细节数据完全符合图表信息。
连贯与衔接
文章采用了分段呈现的方式，但句间衔接词使用不够恰当，且部分句子的逻辑关系不够顺畅。
使用“By contrast”等逻辑衔接词时需确保上下文构成真正的对比关系，增强段落内部的逻辑连贯性。
词汇资源
词汇量较为有限且拼写错误较多，对不可数名词“meat”使用了不恰当的搭配“annual number”。
注意区分可数与不可数名词的量词搭配，并加强对“villustrares”、“annula”等常见词汇拼写的校对。
语法多样性与准确性
句式结构较为单一，频繁出现冠词误用、介词冗余以及句末标点后未加空格等语法与格式问题。
练习复合句的正确表达，避免出现如“the figure increased to over 50kg, it became...”这类缺乏连词的流水句。